All Comments on 'For a Better World'

well the idea of a really fat cock is really grows........i wish u had written about what her and Alex did that would have been hot

an excellent story - nice twist at the end - and despite the absence of an editor there were only a very few minor grammatical errors - please keep writing!

Very good as far as it went, but there has to be a part 2 where Lucy & Alex get it together and the Toad finally gets his just deserts. Also, Lucy has to remember what happened when she blacked out.

Maybe not your best, but definitely an outstanding story, well developed and followed through.

Best of luck in the contest.