by McKenna
Well written, flowed well, somewhat enjoyable, but I don not think I would call it a romance. JimDinMN
that it doesn't even read like a NonConsent/Reluctance story but more like a Romance. This is a riveting story with hot sex. McKenna has done it again. Give us more, lass, give us more.
You told such a sexy story and gave it depth and character. The story is so incredibly written, that I yearn for more! Bravo!!!
This story was raw...delicious...sexual yet personal..I loved it.
From a fellow writer
_Lady1SensuaL1Fire_
Made me near spit me seed it did. Tinny me gawd! Write me sa maer. Aeye can hardly waight, Awye can.
I agree it is more romance than non consent/reluctance. Cant wait to read more of your submissions.
Beautifully written, descriptive, solid characters (both caught between a rock and a hard place, pride be damned!), all the right stuff. I, too, look forward to the next chapter!
There is times when your life & clan dont always work side by side but you have to grin and bear it.
As a Scotsman from a clan to another clan my respect to McKenna and a well wrote story.
...just how well you have accomplished this task. I'll express again my admiration for the piece, lass. Ye did a lovely job of portraying the inner conflicts in both characters, and this reader joins the chorus that desires your continued efforts on the tale of Aengus & Alannah...
Superbly written and wonderfully woven story! Excellent beyond words......awaiting more of your submissions!
your story is amazing and I look forward to reading more of it. Good writing to you.
Lovegreen
there's only one word for that story wow, absolutley wow. I don't know what you'll do but whatever you do don't stop writing because that was completely awe-inspiring. I too look forward to the sequel.
What a wonderful, spellbinding story! Outstanding detail, yet no sign of repetitive use of adjectives that afflict so many stories. Also stayed "in character" better than any story I've ever read. My biggest regret ... is that ... you have so few offerings posted so far. I look forward to reading more of your stories as soon as you can write them. And "McKenna" has suddenly risen to the top of my favorite authors list.
Loved the story. Beautifully written. I hope you continue it.
you didn't write a longer story. I would have choked myself from holding my breath reading it.
Apart from the hot sex, you did a good job in portraying the inner conflicts.
I do not know you, but I am prepared to hate you if I do not get a second chapter of this story. Hate.
and intense. Written with intelligence, control, and understanding. A gem.
The emotions that were brought into this story served to intensify the story. I would have liked to have had a more in depth introduction to delve deeper into the reasoning behind the conflicts and the conflicting emotions... but I also understand that this writing was mainly for "get off" reading, so long stories are usually over looked. But just thought I would tell you... I find the ideas behind this story extremely intriguing. Thank you.
There has to be a second chapter! I need to know the true end! Li-Li
I loved this story; it was realisticaly period without relying on trivial details. You captured the emotions of your protagonists wonderfully, especially the confusion and pain of our hero at the end. Which brings me to my main point: you are a victim of your own success! You have pulled your readers into the story -and now we demand to see how these two characters resolve their issues! Thanks in advance!
Dull stroy showing complete ignorance of both women and highlanders as Clan McTavish scions and students of the epoch will know.
Beautifully written, but fell prey to the same mistake that pretty much all authors who write about Highlanders make; Highlanders didna speaks Scots! Highlanders spoke Gaelic, and lowland Scots wouldn't be caught dead in plaids and kilts. I realize a lot of the authors who write this Scots-speaking Highlander crap know this and are just trying to cater to the faulty expectations of readers who expect all Scottish people to say things like 'Do ye ken?', but I don't agree with pandering.
Your comment is essentially correct about the Gaelic language--especially considering there are twelve recognized Gaelic dialects, of which three, Irish, Welsh and Scotish are still in common use.
However, there are some twenty-two lowland tarten patterns registared as heraldic devices in Scotland with the King of Arms.
I am Of Clan McDougal
well, I am certainly not here to look at how historically accurate it was.... therefore I loved it. Great smut, and anyone who can't see that should find a site that has accurate highland stories and quit being annoying and posting here! I would love to read more!
i pity the poor soul who's busy analyzing linguistics and not getting off to such a great story. and that would be "story," not "stroy" ~ if you're going to be critical of someone's writing, at least have the sense to check your own spelling.
I felt this piece was very insightful, and stimulating! Your characterizations are thoughtful and convincing.
Oh, and HOT. HOT, HOT, HOT.
I hope to see more soon. Please?
Fab story loved the emotion and evocative descriptions. If I want a lesson in Scottish history and dialect I'll get one elswhere, like on my doorstep as thats where I live
I like very much this story but I fel like it's not over, like it's a chapter from a book.
Can you send me an e-mail on macarran@yahoo.com with an answer about this?
Thank you in advance
This story was very exciting....I too felt like it could have continued but I have no complains about it...Your descriptions made the story easy to imagine...I hope you write more...
This is incredible, McK! The writing was novel quality, and I loved how Aengus shifted from cruel and hard to tender! Please let me know when you add to this.
to let curiosity get the better of me. Boy am I glad I did. This story is hot and emotional, well written and makes me yearn for more. I want back story and to know the ending of their tale. I hope you do finish it up, it would make a fantastic novel. I'm in awe.
Amazing story. I was so into it! You really should write books. That was amazing. I was to move to scotland now . lol
That I hadn't read this before, McKenna.
You did such a lovely job with the characters. You revealed them bit by bit, what they were doing, why, and how torn each of them were by it.
Excellent work. I was enthralled.
Hey ! I just had chance to read it - too bad that you haven't continued.
The character development was slow and steady. I enjoyed that you did not tell us who the characters were but showed us through their own thoughts and emotions. Great story and I appreciated the simple ending.
Basicly you should write books, this story was well thought out, and worth my time to read. Feel free to do much more, i am most excited to read your next installment.
It can't end this way. There has to be a happy ending. They belong together.
And I agree, this should be a manuscript1 I would buy it.
Thank you for a lovely, steadily exciting and arousing story.
Being of Centic/Viking heritage, I appreciate your allowing my presence in the room so I could witness their dialogue, pride, and passion. What a treat! You are a treasure.
to read. i loved it. Maybe youmcould write a follow up or even give the idea to a highland novel author..... Or even better you could turn this into a little novel of your own. Its too good to let go of.
That was wonderful, but unfortunately a story you havent added even though you have the content to extend. I hope one day you continue Alannah and Aengus's passionate tale.
I loved this story but ended to soon so I rate it 3 stars just for the end nothing else.
Oh, too bad it's short. I think this would really be great if you continue it. (oh please do continue, hehe :) Nice plot. I like it.
Uhm, ever read Diana Gabaldon? ;)
Your stroy was excellent! more please!
for not finishing this story. UGH!!! It is so rare to find a great story on this site, so I guess I'll just have to make due with re-reading this story from time to time. You still suck though.
i always come back to this story and i love it. please write more! please!
A well paced and engaging read such as this is hard to find. I thoroughly enjoyed this
I can't thank you enough for your knowledgeable and talented use of diction and grammar! I majored in English Literature in college and read vanilla literary works extensively for pleasure. I've enjoyed many of the stories here on Literotica but often have to fight to get past grammatical errors and stiff language. Your story was a pleasure to read in multiple senses and I highly encourage you to continue writing!
You gotta finish it to where they both succumb to the feelings they have for each other...the McTavish has to keep her! This is on a par with the historical romance novels I read; but this is more raw. Love it!
i'm sure i'm not the only one rooting for a sequel;
SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL!
Anon below, nope, you're not the only one. :)
I do understand though, McKenna, how sometimes a story is just done. You write beautifully and I have long since favorited you. :)
i agree with every1... sequel. the story is too good to stand alone need more
One of the best best best stories I've read - and I don't just mean erotica!
You're a good writer, wish there were more submissions like this.
I love this! Best revenge story I've read. A nice, succinct snapshot into a complicated relationship.
i've read this a couple of times and its power still holds...a lot emotions were able to be conveyed on a slice of story...do i wish it could be developed further? certainly...but as it is, it's one helluva example of powerful writing
I was honestly shocked to find something like this here. This story was amazing and well written. Please write more!
This is very well written and it would be a crime to not complete it...Please I'm dying of curiosity to find out what happens next...
Wow, what a pleasure to find such a well-written story here. Beautiful, moving, concise... Thank you for sharing your talent.
She will kill the child when it is born and have it sent to him.
This was so well-written and it's left such a huge impression on me as I first read this a couple weeks ago. I didn't have time to comment then, but wanted to come back and say, "Bravo!"
Simply a masterpiece!
All her family has to do is kill the child.His brother will still be dead along with his child.Some revenge!Stupid men!Please finish the story.
This story is so well written and ensnares the reader - please write a second chapter!
i loved the story and it really captivated me but the whole Scottish side of it turned me off
I liked it a lot. One of the better stories I've read on this site. The fact that it was a sexy Scot made it all the better. Only qualm is with continuity; at one point you described her eyes as brown, then they were green. Please, keep writing.
i agree we need more of this, a real story as well as the exciting sexual aspect
Thou Cannae
or Willnae !?!
Deliteful story , deliteful Scottish highlander brogue !! pl. keep on writin' !
Please please PLEASE!! Continue this story! There's sooo much more to tell...
You have fed my need for historical romances with some extra sex in the mix. I wish you would add more to this story. I am really enjoying the main characters. I hope you would continue with this series. I think it would be worth it and the readers would go crazy for it as well. Thanks for feeding my hunger! :-) Syn'
I love historical romances. My all time favorites. Please do continue. I never looked away from the words you wrote. You had my full attention. Looking forward to chapter 2 of For the Honour of Clan McTavish!
Wonderfully written with a pure and beautiful voice. Great job.
This is absolutely wonderful writing. I see you haven't written for awhile. Please tell me you have a complete novel out there somewhere so I can finish reading this wonderful story. I usually don't comment, but I sense a gifted writer. Please continue, for we will all benefit from your wonderful creations.