All Comments on 'For The Life of You Ch. 02'

Fantastic story.

I love it. Keep on writing.

Through their actions, your characters stand up and walk out from text. Great stuff. The description of Justin studying the computer screen in the first paragraph was a bit awkward, and you could tighten up sentence-to-sentence flow in some places. I'm only telling you this because the writing is excellent and it's easy for me to see the flaws. I'm a writer myself, although, not on this site. I edit and edit and edit my stuff. (Now I connected my comment to the correct chapter.)

I'm sitting here reading and re-reading your comment. I don't know what to say, but WOW! Thank you so much. I can't stop smiling.

I am absolutely loving your story...please update soon.

Five.

Wow. I just read through both chapters start to finish. I'll have to digest it a while. This is what I get for reading your work in reverse order. I did not see a story like this coming. Frankly, I'm surprised that there have not been more comments posted on these two chapters, and a stronger score, especially on chapter 2. I've only seen one or two authors here that write longer and can keep my attention to read for hours. Well. Done.