All Comments on 'For Your Viewing Pleasure Ch. 01'

I like this. It is a nice starting point. You had me going for a minute. At the beginning I thought that maybe Aiden would be getting it on w his mother when Holly stomps in yelling "Alright then, time to break up the party!"

I would like to see more character development in future chapters. Take your time getting to the naughty bits. Before they get down to doing the nasty I'm sure Holly won't mind if Aiden buys toys for her to use (as long as he can watch). Hey, Aiden has probably been disregarding Holly's privacy hoping to get a few glimpses of "this-n-that." I'm sure he can help find/build places where she can stash her toys (the ones he is going to buy for her).

Thank your for sharing your creative efforts with us.

I'm eagerly awaiting the promised "second round"