All Comments on 'Forbidden!'

I liked the plotting of the story. The pace was just right, not rushed at all. Even the characters had a nice background to them. I hope there's more to come. I don't want it dragged out but at least two more parts would be nice.

great story. awesome dialogue. and a bit of intrigue. well done.

I am hoping the end of the story will lead to more chapters. Writing and plot were great

They've all been done before so relax

I thought it was fantastic good job

Stolen story? You'd better tell Daisy's daddy!

Or the police...

This wasn't your best work, at all. I usually enjoy your stories I thought it was very boring.

Quite enjoyed hope to have a second chapter.

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At this point I should describe my sister. She is slim, quite short, about five feet six. Long light brown hair.

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5'6" is not even remotely short, hell it's probably very average, even tall in a lot of areas. Now 5' would be working on short!

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"Bald."

"Pardon?"

"Since you ask. It's bald. Fully shaved."

" 'k."

"Would you really?"

"What?"

"Lick my pussy?"

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O.k., are these two deaf, or just fucking stupid? I feel like Im watching japanese anime where they repeat the question at each other, lol!

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"Well then Steve said that the wet patch smelled like sperm.

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Oh come ON!! Smelled like sperm?? Cold sperm doesnt really HAVE a smell! Hot sperm has a slightly acrid chlorine type smell (best I can think to describe it), but after its been sitting? Nah. ...and who the fuck touches a wet spot on a communal sofa then sticks his fucking finger in his mouth?!

The panties and hose are easy enough to explain, just tell him sis wanted to get confortable before she napped on the sofa and took them off. Honestly all they have to do is tell the guy to shut his trap, it is brothers store after all, lol!

Enjoyed it, but it begs for at least one more chapter! Two if she goes after daddy ;)