by solitarycafe
Solid story. Very well told. BUT you have a lot of wasted space in this one. I like the character and the descriptions but most of this post wasn't really necessary for the story. And NO I don't mean more sex. I mean you could have gotten to the elf by page one. I think you're being over descriptive and need to tone it back a bit.
That being said. I am very much looking forward to the next part of this story.
I have been trying to trim my writing a bit and I definitely agree that this story could have been shortened. I appreciate the feedback!