All Comments on 'Forced Ch. 01'

Good plot. Burns it up in that first gangbang scene. Though it seems you rush through some of your later scenes. Slow it down.

"Gerald Torrez gazed at the prone female form laying sprawled out naked before him." Redundancies. Would be better as, "Gerald Torrez gazed at the female form sprawled out naked in front of him." More words are not always better, especially when most of them mean the same thing. And it's "lying", not "laying."

You have a lot of bizarre phrasing and missing punctuation. I suggest finding an editor.

You need to put this in "Incest" or at least warn of it at the beginning. Many people have a strong dislike for incest and don't want to read it.

I agree ... good plot and generally good writing, though there are a few language errors that, if corrected would improve the reading a bit ... find a good editor (every author needs one!).