All Comments on 'Forced Into Marriage'

Your story was amazing,okay I need to find another reason for liking it besides the fact that my name is Sarah as well. Excellent story,will love to read more. Perhapes one day I will post my writings,but getting shy about that..lol

Passion ... reluctance ... makes me wonder if she warms up or if he has to force her again in the morning ... *shiver*

mmmmmm i was rock hard reading it

It was like reading my own fantasy. i loved this cat and dog game.

Deborah, 26.

The story, such as it was, was almost impossible to read because of the missing words and constant change in tense. There were many sentences that changed tense in mid-stream.

A note to the author: choose a tense and stick to it. And by the way, get an editor.

if your first language is actually english, why on earth don't you learn to speak and write it properly. a good story ruined - you changed tenses, mis-spelled - all you need to do is ask someone to read it through for you before you submit it and you could have an excellent piece of work. pity.

the grammar was a bit off, but the story had me stroking myself throughout. good job.

Did not even get to the third paragraph before deciding it wasn't worth the read.

It is not cute to add an s to every word or every other word, this is not a make believe world where you are a Neko or any of the hundreds of Japanese anime that are out there. Good grief, how did this story get such a high rating?

Yeah, there are minor grammatical mistakes, but hell... this story is SO incredibly hot! I'd rather read stories like this, than something that is grammatically correct but boring.

Your story was great and you're a good writer. The image of your written words were very arousing, thank you.

I am sorry to say, but I could not read past the first three paragraphs, given your poor use of grammar.

Grammar.

Also not how the hymen works.

true potrayal of wedding n8 of any virgin bride with no orgasm at all

p.s:- no i wont bash you for your grammer its okay not to be perfect all the time

“ I will give anything to have her willingly make love to me” - Except time, getting to know her or being decent.