All Comments on 'Forsaken Pt. 03: Sword Song'

It feels like flash fiction, but not. I really like your story and setting, but the very short chapters mean that just as I am getting to know a character and story, it's over. I'd love to see you take a bit more time to flesh these out.

Also, I think this belongs under the non-erotic section of the site. There's nothing here that I would really consider erotic sci-fi/fantasy, rather it's just fantasy.

Because of the length, lack of story depth, and missing any real erotic sections, this is a 4 star to me. Well written, but not great.