All Comments on 'Found Love in Mature Woman'

I gave up reading,,,, poor grammar is annoying but this felt like it had been Google translated from another language

The story line is erotic and exciting however the continuity in this story needs attention, is she shaved or not? I understand that you do not have English as your first language and you made a reasonable attempt at translation but there are many errors.

e.g. glare is to stare in an angry or fierce way.

get your self an editor

Thanks for sharing

... spoiled by poor presentation, as so many good stories are. You really must read through your work, or get someone else to do so, and don't rely on spell-checkers -- and certainly not on so-called grammar checkers!

Your work deserves a better telling. Three stars -- and keep writing.

Get an editor so that it at least resembles English and not double-Dutch

Too bad a story with potential has such poor grammar, spelling, structure and more.

I am sure, if you asked, someone would work with you as your editor.

Try again but have an editor read it first before submitting.

I am English, from the UK, and I find it disgusting that a perfectly good story - written better tha 95% on this site - is dismissed so callously just because the rhythm of the read is not the same as you would expect from a "good ol' boy.".

To: Anonymous

What credentials you have posting comments to critique those who summit articles when yourself in your whole member's life never submit any article?

Who you think you're? A standard bearer in English Language writing?

You never show you have the literacy to string alphabets into words; words into proper sentences to come up with meaning articles. Yet you opined others.

Instead you write to censure in demeaning repetitive mundane comments.

You best let some expert in the English Language re-write your comments for credibility before submitting.

To Robyn1859,

What a simpleton you are? You cannot understand what you read? Then blame it on the writer. What idiotic excuse.

Since you claimed to be so literal in the English Language can't you decipher?

So you think a mere translation from another language makes a story? What superficial mind. Or insinuating plagiarism? Then show evidence instead of shooting from the hips.

You seem to be an empty vessel making noises or a wiseacre who pride yourself in making wild allegations. Grow up please.

Go and improve on your language before coming again to make a stooge of yourself.

To Anonymous

What a moron you are. When did I wrote I am better than the 95%? Show me my words. You merely living in your own world like a toad in a well and make up fantasy about others?

If you have such talent in English Language then take up my challenge to write on your very own and submit articles. Using an editor to re-write your pending story I guess no one will fault you because you're never an originator.

Or you can only repeat vague comments? Pick your choice to be creditable. Show your credentials.

For your information unlike you, I never self credit myself.

Sentence structure and verb tense is critical in English. It reads like spoken broken English. The plot is excellent. Some may expect perfection, but that comes with experience and training. I am being anonymous because I do not care to write about my exploits. Please continue your writings. The readers should understand.

By writing you have done more than most for whom English is their native language.

Good for you.

But you need to understand that your syntax, speech patterns, conjugation, and vocabulary do not conform with common usage. There are some readers who are critical of grammatical errors by English speaking writers. Being outside the norm will attract even more attention from the self appointed language monitors.

Don't let them irritate you. Don't react by yelling back at them, it only encourages them.

Keep writing, you told a uniquely different intergenerational love story. But if I can offer a suggestion, take advantage of the services of one of the editors or proof readers here on Lit. Or, if not, grow some thick skin, and don't take the comments from the diction police personally.

Robyn1859 be specific. Don't discredit the submitter effort. How abiut write and show your language proficiency?

While some of the sentence structure is difficult to read, it is still a great story. The author used extraordinary words that I did not expect from a non-Engish speaking person to use. As for the story itself, what young man who likes older women not love this scenario? The daughter was becoming distant and the mother becoming infatuated gave the young man every reason to dowhat he did.