All Comments on 'Freedom of Indecision Ch. 01'

I look forward to chapter 2

Great story! But is her name Jennifer or Jessica?

You have a descriptive, elegant way of writing and everything starts off quite well. There are some grammatical errors ("it's" when it should be "its", for example). The one thing that took me away from the elegance of what you started were the words like slit, slot, meat, hole and cum. Obviously, that's personal preference and you may have chosen them for a reason. But this woman seems to have a somewhat polished veneer, and her suitor most certainly does. Maybe others feel differently, but for me, when I read those cruder words contrasted with the way the piece started, it makes it hard for me to stay connected to the story. Just one person's opinion; good luck on the rest of the story.