All Comments on 'French Comparisons Ch. 01'

Second person is just about the worst possible choice - necessary, I suppose for the cuckold story line. You need to be much more careful of tense - most of the story is in present tense (also the worst possible choice) but it keeps dropping into past tense. And you need to be careful with names, Ciara is too close to Clara; and who the fuck is Lupa? And what red-blooded male would go straight to mish fucking when an attractive girl that he's just met lies on the floor and spreads her legs?