All Comments on 'Friday Night Fantasy'

Any "writer" who can't use quote marks in the dialogue is a writer who never made it beyond the 3rd grade, and it shows.

Your lack of proper punctuation not withstanding, I enjoyed your story. It was very erotic and a theme I have not run across lately. Beware of the Sociologists who may criticize you for contributing to the high divorce rate because you have written about something unconventional to them. I liked it and polish will come with practice.

Not bad not good either.Not bad description of sex, not good because of the threesome but hey this is sex site isn't?

Make use of a spelling/grammer checker. It might also help if you solicit one of the volunteer editors available. The story idea is good, but could be more fully explored. I felt it ended too abruptly, and could use more character development. Still, it's better than I have been able to do.

Or to put it another way: Quotation marks are <b><i>NOT</i></b> optional.