All Comments on 'Friend With Benefits'

in the middle of the second page the story went from two named people to two people named "you and I" it confuzzed me a bit and thus threw the story line off. please try to stick to one set of charaters and not switch to the personal I aspect if you are using two possibly made up names for the story

hi i loved this story i have a friend with benefits and he is sooooooo hot.this story reminds me of the the kind of fun we have together.

I agree that your story needs a single point of view-- you currently use first person AND second person. Also, edit it for missing words; they detract from the description.