All Comments on 'From Jenny to Mei Ch. 18'

I like your characters. These people come alive and that's not easy to do.

Nǐ kěyǐ jiào wǒ xiǎo mèimei.

;-)

Scorching as always.

and yet so complex and involved, so.... full!

J

Really masterful. If this isn't paraphrasing your actual life experience, the reader would imagine that the writer wishes it were the case.

One thing, though. ... the way you use "loose" when "lose" is called for demands that you be taken over one's knee.

...about the misspellings - defiantly instead of definitely, complement for compliment, he lent back for he leaned back, steal for steel the metal, heals for heels of foot or shoe, laying for lying (as on the bed, say), penultimate (did you really mean "second from the end"? And so on...

These surprise me, coming from someone so articulate and imaginative with the flow of language. This is, however, how my wife writes, though very bright and educated. A problem since birth, and not correctable through "hard work". Her writing is in government documents, so must be flawless. Either a colleague or I will edit. Not such a problem in Literotica. My dear wife must wonder what it is I spend so much time reading. I do thank you, very much.

Beautiful and sublime. Your characterization, dialogue and description are all fantastic. Thank you for a wonderfully erotic story.

One quibble: I think you meant “dopamine”, not seratonin. The latter relates to stress, not pleasure.

I love the meeting of Mei & Ai, can’t wait to see where they go together. I’m not sure where Karla stands in this group in the future. Markéta with the French President is a waste of time in my opinion for this story.