by jsmjsm
Very realistic descriptions and feelings. Like many things after the first time it becomes easier and more enjoyable. Abbie will want to see the action
You are in great need of an editor. Some of your errors are so large they cause a year or two of nuclear winter, removing all traces of a plot. Still I gave you a five. Talent is rare. You should take it seriously. You should never let your name be seen on something you haven't bothered to finish.