All Comments on 'From Stubble to Foundation'

For the most part, this story is enjoyable. It is albeit hard to read, broken English really makes it rough. If you were to have it edited, and repost, perhaps it would be thoroughly enjoyable... I had to stop at the start of the 3rd page. Maybe the other stories you have could be edited and reposted as well.?

wow greart story I put myself I story I love it

I usually don't read stories this long but this had me all the way. Yes, some grammatical work would improve it but I was able to look past them to enjoy it.

You wrote a great story.. I really liked it.. I do see a lot of myself in Daniela in terms of finding any expressing the inner girl.. I love being soft and feminine and submissive to a degree and looking to please the other person whether a guy or girl.. please continue and don't worry too much about your wording since the story is most important

GET AN EDITOR!!!

You made five major errors in the opening paragraph, and it was a short paragraph. This was simply unreadable!

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Fix it and resubmit as a new story.

Especially those from those who have yet to submit a story of their own.

This site is all about Literotica, not whether an author is competing for a degree in English Lit etc:

Ok there are mistakes but to condem it after one paragraph, grow up, read on then criticise.

Very romantic. I love men and the concepts here make for an exciting and erotic read. Yes, some editing would be great, but the story has heart, sex, romance and finally, love. Good hot fun!

But can't you find a friend who speaks English as their first language or is at least moderately competent in the language to give you editorial help! You have a major error in every other sentence at the start (and sometimes more often.)

It is nearly unreadable.

This was a great story. Oh how I wish I was in Daniela's place. I would give almost anything for it to be me in the male to female position. I would like to see you continue the story as your Daniela goes for the full gender reassignment surgery and live life forever as a women.

Kept me feeling horny and wanting to more.this story is great imagining how far Danielast could be changed

from reading the story i can no doubt see sights of dyslexia, can feel with you as so do i...

no doubt the guy put his all into this story to deliver something i've never read before and i'm glad you did

I put myself in to Danella's position. It would be a dream to find a Pauly.

I would submit to a Pauly without a second thought. My desire / dream is to become a woman.

I hope to read more stories from this writer. He easily won my attention.