All Comments on 'Fucking My Best Friend's Boyfriend'

That was crap. Total waste of a fuck.

... please MAKE UP YOUR MIND?????

Are you writing the story in 'Present' tense, as if it is happening now, or are you writing it in PAST tense, as something that happened on a previous occasion?

DO NOT, EVER, use both Tenses in the same story!

That seemed like a guy writing a girls part.

This needs so much work it's hard to figure out where to start. First, as one critic observed, you need to stay in a verb tense. Second, both key characters are completely flat; they do not suspend our disbelief in the the events going on in the story. Finally, good porn is a literary art and requires as much plot development as any other piece of literature. You didn't set up much in the way of setting, there is little in the way of theme, and- as I said earlier- the characters are one-dimensional. All stories have to have these elements; the better they are used, the better the story. Take a writing class, it'll be fun.

Short and sweet! I liked how you went straight into fucking. I was so turned on I didn't even notice the mistakes. Other than that I liked it!

It needs a little work but you had a good concept. Plan it out a little better and it would go from good to great.

Gay

This story was ao hot. and its funny because i wanna fuck my neatfriends noyrfriend. And their names are Liz and Kyle.

love that and I so wanna do

Noo

This story was rushed i couldnt really enjoy it.

It was good, rough and rushed like how realistic most sex is

My girlfriend's best friend was at her birthday party in a restaurant, we had a couple of taxis and it was pouring with rain..we shared the same taxi sitting next to each other at the back..she kept telling me she was soaking wet which made me instantly hard for her..she is ridiculously stunning and naughty..she grabbed my hand and guided it in between her legs..she really was soaking wet!! Whispering in each other's ears how much we've wanted imagined fantasised and wanked about us together she unbuttoned my jeans and sucked my hard hot throbbing precum soaked cock not caring who saw or heard