All Comments on 'Full Moon Pt. 01'

Nice keep it going

Absolute rubbish, written by a wanker.

he fuck his sister then he is gonna fuck his best friend i can tell u guys.

Boring as hell. It would be more exciting watching concrete evaporate.

so slow a snail would be impressed nails this on the head.

yeah, you're bored but that doesn't mean you need to write a crappy story. If I want a crappy story I'll listen to a Donald Trump speech and shout Heil Hitler

It was going ok until the last page

Well I'm not gonna lie it needed alot of work but I kinda suspected it was gonna be paranormal so it's not that bad. Keep trying I like where it's going and I have faith you will get better

It would have been real sexy it the best friend joined in the incest. It would have made the slow beginning of the story worth it.

The end was random, weird, and, honestly annoyingly uncalled for. It could have been a great story with effort.

You had a good incest story going. Then you ruin it with some paranormal bs that doesn't add to the story? WTF? You call yourself a writer; I call you a jackass.

Not too bad, I guess you needed that that last part to go with your title. The ending was pretty bad, yes, but it was still pretty good. You, in my opinion took longer to describe the guy's best friend than the sister in my opinion. I love how you put only $69 for the necklace. I laughed. Anyways, good story, everyone says it's bad, but I think it's good. Just make the next one so I can read it and find out about the redhead woman.

Good stuff!

This kind of story is unique in this category. Excited for more chapters! :)

You should've had the best friend and him get together harley/batman would've been hot.

The ending makes no sense you need to finish it with a 2nd chapter like make him save his sister or make him realize he's in love with his best friend and make her dump her boyfriend

You really need to have someone edit this story, I try to follow it but the lack of proper English and miss spelling makes it hard to grasp the finer parts of this story.

What was that ending all about?

My biggest critique is actually on your tendency to describe the unnecessary actions. You don't have to write out everything someone does, reading about how someone opens, closes, and then locks a door. They walk down the hall, down stairs, and so on is positively droll. Some things are all right to assume a person will know had to happen to go from one action to another. Other than that it was a decent story, nothing amazing, but I'd like to read more. Just hopefully without all the unnecessary descriptions.

Would love to see more.

Eagerly awaiting more chapters.

Would love to see the next installment