All Comments on 'Fun in the Sun'

Horrible. Writing from that perspective requires a sophistication of skill that your writing proficiency severely lacks. Also, straight dudes should stick to writing about what they're capable of - lesbian interaction is way outta your emotional understanding.

I know that the other comment about this story wasn't very favorable but I really liked it.

It's something that could happen and dose happen a lot more that you think that it does

I've had it happen to me in similar circumstances so I know that it happens.

It was a girl who lives in the complex where I live and she approached me at the complex pool and asked me to put sunscreen on her.

Before the day was over we were in her condo having sex with each other.

It was the start of a relationship that's lasted for almost two years.

Is that what this oddball perspective is called? Whatever it is, it's annoying at the best of times, and , in a piece this short, where there is no room for the reader to adjust, it's just plain annoying. (Rule # 1 - don't annoy your reader!)