All Comments on 'Fun in University Halls Ch. 01'

A good first effort. I have found that the best stories on Lit are those with detail - and you have a sense of it .. the beer in the doorway etc. But you need to be consistent throughout - for eg. - In the scene outside the bar: the men were hugging the women to warm them. Something could have been done with it. Who was our protagonist hugging for instance? Was it Emma? Did it start off there?

Good stuff. I look forward to reading more.

Cood Start. Now we need to see what and who else he has in his Bed and Theirs. and how does he and his Mates get along.

Pretty Good need to hear more

I can recognise a true story when I see one. Great story and well told.

Loved it, but I was waiting for you to bang Sarah that next morning before you left the girls' flat....