by Glaze72
All I can say is more.... And you might consider turning it into a movie script.
My goodness, this guy better be real careful in the future. He told her to hit him with that cookie sheet, hard enough to hurt. So, she hauls off and SMASHES his FACE in with it, breaking nose, cheeks, and teeth! "Say my name, Bitch! And get it right!"
Other than that little exercise in righteous fury from an insulted goddess, this was really top notch story telling. I look forward to more from you in future. Many thanks.
Another excellent tale! Remind me not to piss off my goddess. Thank you for this one. Five Stars!
I have so many questions about the radical ways his life has changed.
His mother
The Bar exam
His plans to do good as an attorney
The Estate
???
There are lots of places this story good go as they learn the idiosyncracies of their lives, Chicago corruption, corporate greed, and maybe even the supernatural! I hope you will give us more.
two amazing stories in as many days, thank you for the gift of your writing
You have held my attention thru these two stories. Please do not stop now. Too many loose ends.
Really, really good story and exceptionally well written! 5 stars, for sure!
Thank you for such a great story! Good characters, really well written.
The Technician has some competition now, in Celtic-themed stories.
5*!
John
A great mix of erotica and mythology. I hope you keep it going as a series.
... not just an erotic stories site.
Great story, six stars for sure.
I can't get over the wonderful stories we have for this Valentine's Day! It's as if we were being given a gift of not just sex stories, but some of the best erotic stories I have read on this site to date! Please keep writing, I truly enjoy your work and have read most of the stories with the exception of Balance. I haven't found the time just yet, but I will.
Splendid tale of erotic fantasy
I’d like to see the movie
what a great story... i hope you follow it up... what adventures, not just with her family and the two of them. but what of traveling the world after he passes the bar and helping mother earth. Now that would be another story... mother earth, and the two of them. oh the stories that could be made of that... lol.. thank you...
Great story. When you got to the part about the damage the grandfather had done to her body, it gave me physical pain. Which made the rest of the story all the sweeter.
Five stars, keep up the good work.
Really enjoyed reading this great story. The dialogue was exceptional, written with just the right touch. Bravos.
I was enjoying the story, but there was a shift in the tone that I wasn't wild about. Around the time she hits him with the cookie sheet it suddenly felt like I was reading the script for a zany sitcom. There had been humor before that, but after that point it became a bit silly; if only when compared with what came before it.
Not a bad story by any means, just not one of my favorites.
The plot flowed easily and the characters built convincingly. I'd like a little more. Actually, several more chapters would be better!
Lovely story. Good, believable characters.
I copied one of the "anonymous" posts:
"The plot flowed easily and the characters built convincingly. I'd like a little more. Actually, several more chapters would be better!"
Yes - more please!!
Your stories are all so very different and show real imagination. Thank you for them, and please write more.
Out of the ashes of pain, they find love! Wonderfully done! Thank you!
You can find it on my personal website, along with a lot more, at www.alanachurch.com!
Your writing is literally heads and shoulders above 100% of all the other stories on this website. Amazing. I'd never thought I'd find a story of this calibre on this website.
I wish there is more!
I want to see how Tom's mother will react to his new beautiful wife and her new daughter-in-law! Did Tom even introduced Rhiannon to her before they did the ritual?
Are they going to do a normal wedding after this? This story just got me so intrigued!
Good job!
Great storytelling! You are a wonderful writer.
The story flowed smoothly. Rhiannon and Tom were well done. The nod to Tolkien was greatly appreciated. I will request another chapter, regrettably I have read your comments. But it never hurts to ask.
Thank you,
tedi
Fantastic story, l put off reading this forever, didn’t think l’d like it. How wrong l was.
Terrific tale well worth 5/5. Thank u author.
I really wish you had expanded this story, could you imagine, Tom going to her homeworld and living there to find out she is pregnant with a daughter. Could you imagine tom being made love to by the mother while the daughter is made love to by the dad? So Many possibilities, following up with the couple from the market to see if the daughter becomes a priestess of her order. So many possibilities, Tom passing the bar and saving lands that her people feel are sacred and winning. How he would be a popular man in their nation, Maybe one day Tom and Rihanna marry and something special happens and he becomes Immortal....would you consider it plz..
ANY story that references Saturday Night Live and has that lawyer joke at the end is just brill!
What do you call a thousand lawyers at the bottom on the ocean?
A good start.
Nicely written 👌
Really enjoyed the story, hot, sexy with some magic folklore thrown in. I've just got to hit-pick several things, which didn't distract from the story, but inquiring minds want to know. When Rhiannon first appeared to Tom, she was naked, but it wasn't until later when she opened her robe that she didn't have nips or a pussy. Now come Tom didn't notice that right away?
When Tom's mother left, her note said to call her when he got up. He didn't and she never called him to find out why?
What happened to the grandfather's holdings and wealth? Did Tom get any of it, not that he needed it now?
Just some things that need to be cleared up so I can sleep at night without worrying, lol. Great story, thanks
I should have made this a favourite the first time I read it, it's taken ages to find it again.
Another 5 🌟 story by the author. Love how they mix the supernatural and erotica so beautifully. I generally prefer Incest stories, but am so glad that made an exception for this story.
Stupid pussy boy (who is mentally challenged) jerks himself off rather than having fun with her. Submissive little bitch.
I like the story, but you really went with the word salad on this one, trying to channel your inner Chaucer?
Excellently told, though I must agree with some of the other commentors that there are too many items left open for it to end at this point. His bar exam and subsequent practice, the couple Rhiannon blessed and their daughter, his mother and the call that never happened, the will of his grandfather and holdings there in, if Rhiannon and Tom get married and have a son, if the son falls for the blessed couples daughter (does she become priestess?), having the entry to Tir-na-nog become a protected area, or using the resources from his grandfathers estate to buy it and build a home there in the mortal realm to protect it for as long as his family lives there and owns it, bringing Rhiannon 'home' without crossing the barrier into the realm of the immortals? All these and more should be closed out for the story... their children taking over in the mortal world while he becomes her husband and enters the immortal world with his wife? The story deserves to have these and any other open items closed out.... even with just a short story Epilog edition... but a full story would be better. :)
The problem with stories this good is always the same: what are my five stars if i have warranted them before to lesser stories? In hindsight i rated those too high, you're demonstrating.
Thanks, seriously, great work, and thought provoking.
For the second time I have used this website for erotica, finding a beautiful story instead. A very pleasant surprise. Thank you, this was incredible.
Enjoyed it this time as much as the first time I read it. (Although you still have a few typos - such as "feel" instead of "feet"). Thanks. Doug (Lobosolo51)