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All Comments on 'Gag Ch. 01'

by meop79

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago

Awesome, ch. 2 soon please!

catnip333catnip333almost 9 years ago
A Twisted Dark 'Frozen'.

The story really captivated me, it flowed beautifully, and the character Gag was engaging , perhaps the 'hero monster' in us all. I am looking forward to the next chapter to see were the story leads.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
Needs editing

Nice premise and development. But, there are typos and story flow issues. If you get someone to go over it with an outside perspective it can develop into a great short story.

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