All Comments on 'Gamers Pt. 06'

not gonna lie. this kind of messed with my head.

Jazz was fast to label Kasia a "lying bitch", but she doesn't seem to be any better. Hope to see next chapter soon. *****

I cannot wait for the next chapter.

I realized earlier that this was probably coming. Still it hurts. I lost a lot of respect for Jazz given what she is doing/has done to Dean.

Sigh, I guess I read romance for the kinder/gentler stuff. This story so far hasn't really been that.

None the less, please keep writing. I have "enjoyed" all your stories, and look for your submissions. I am very interested in seeing where this is going.

This chapter really changed the game. First I was a little sad, but the more I think about it, the more I love this story. Well done. It is easier to write about the developing loving relationship rather than the rocky road they can take. We've all (or most of us) had our hearts broken. Thank you for bringing the reader to this bitter-sweet point. Looking forward to the next chapter.

It may be flaws in my writing; it may be that people project their own issues. You can be disappointed in Jazz, but calling her a bitch is a bit much. If Dean heard you, he might ask you to step outside.

a) she warned him that she wasn't girlfriend material (multiple times)

b) she encouraged him to share the wealth/ see other girls

c) she didn't know for sure that she was going (it was on again/ off again)

d) people are complicated, and make errors of judgment. Stories would be awfully boring if they were perfect

e) the story isn't over

f) maybe I shouldn't comment on my own stories

I've enjoyed this story quite a bit! Your writing is good, the story is fun, and the characters are interesting and developing. With respect to hatred first of Kasia and now especially with Jazz, some folks don't understand foreshadowing, clearly.

Point d) is incredibly important, and is exactly why your stories turn out so well.

I also really liked the inclusion of Chekov's Stack of Art Supplies... although I would have been OK with the resolution coming in a later chapter.

I look forward to the next installment.

Love your story, hope all his girlfriends don't turn out to be liars. This story was so freaking true I love it though.

Previous comment was in heat of the moment, still love ALL of your work.

Like the genre switch and poor guy.

Thanks for the flashback! Story is too damn believable

This story has been great so far. The development of your characters has made this chapter that much more emotional. My only complaint is a small mistake in your science. Females are XX chromosome and males are XY. So at the point of telling deans mum that she was Big Y because of chromosomes and genetics... Its not a massive thing, its just the scientist in me wants to help correct small scientific mistakes if I can.

Other than that your a great author and I'd recommend this series to anyone looking for a good read.

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And I still cry every time. I hurt for both of them and painful memories of my own resurface. Thank you.

Nthusiastic

Jazz made some mistakes, but they were so minor. The kind that any fallible human would make. Especially when you consider that they did have a great relationship. Who the hell wouldn't have trouble letting that go just because of some cold logic says it might be necessary. Sometimes a situation is shit all around even though nobody was an asshole.

bloody good

thank you

While I've been waiting for the new chapters of "Gaming: D&D" I've been re-reading your older stories; they're all among my favorites ever. In reading this chapter I found an inconsistency that threw me for a loop for a bit, until I went back and read it over a few times. You have them in the wrong apartment once... Here's your quote:

Somehow, some way, the second set ended. Jazz took my hand and led me out of the club. She hailed a taxi, and we got back to her apartment... [They went back to HER apt]

... Once inside my apartment, she wasted no time... [But - ended up in HIS apartment]

...She disengaged and went off to the bathroom. I needed to clean up as well, so I gave her a few minutes, and then followed. On the way to the bathroom, I detoured to the little room where she kept her computer. [But - he needs to be in HER apartment to see her stuff]

I felt that like a real break up. I have been reading this instead of my Kindle tonight.

I don’t just mean the best in this series, I mean the best thing written on this site.

I know you are trying to make your characters believable, but I didn't trust the forshadowing of her moving away because it didn't make since.

Jazz kept saying "she wasn't girlfriend material", when she could have just as easily told Dean she just wanted a Summer Fling (because initially that was exactly what she wanted).

I doubt Dean would have done anything different, if he knew there was a real chance Jazz was leaving. Minus the Sucker Punch!

What are real chances any guy would turn down Jazz for a Summer fling because she would be moving away? Got to be less than 1%

Oh god my heart T_T

i have to say i feel this one right to my core i started crying reading the end...i cant stop hoping they get back together. and i heard phil collins cant stop loving you playing in my head. i just love your writing

I was expecting something, since I have read one of your stories before, but damn. I teared up and got the sniffles.

Well, that sucked!

5 stars. loved it.

Still a bit iffy on why she didn't tell him sooner when she realized he was catching feelings and they started getting closer. I get she wanted to keep things casual but wouldn't telling him have been way easier than the "i'm not girlfriend maerial" line?

or is it that she just definitively found out she's leaving not too long ago? If so then that makes sense, but that seems at odds with how everyone,m even his mom, was aware.

So all in all, I think the place she really fucked up in was not telling him when she was sure she was going to leave and telling everyone else apart from him. Apart from that she did her best to make sure he didn't get hurt in her ow way.

i misread the mom thing, my mistake

Yep it hurts, hurts bad. Been there done that. Only difference l was not as nice as Dean. I made it really easy for her. I just upped and walked out. No goodbye.

She broke my heart by leaving to go OS at the last minute. I broke hers by not giving her the goodbye she wanted as lovers. I was young, she hurt me, l hurt her. Never spoke to her again.

5/5

Very good, was expecting something, maybe a bi relationship from Jazz but not the moving. Keep writing it's very good. One story I read that's not just about the sex.

I tried a long distance relationship once. We were hot and heavy for a few months, and promised to stay in contact over the summer. Only we did not have the internet back then so we were supposed to write love letters back and forth. Doppy and Grumpy could write better letters than I did. So we wrote back and forth for a few weeks, then it was once a month, then nothing. When she came back to school we went out once. The fire had gone out, and we both had moved on. I know of only one long distance relationship that worked out, but only because both of them were rich and were able to fly out and see each other every few weeks. Great story though!

Amazing work! I’m not crying, your crying.

The mistake she made was not telling him WHY she was "not girlfriend material" at the beginning. She didn't know for sure it would happen, but she knew it COULD, and that information should have been shared up front right at the beginning so that he would know what the potentiality here was. After that if he falls for her anyway and gets his heart broken that's on him. But she didn't give him the information he needed to make an informed decision on whether to focus on her alone.

This: "- "Goodbye? Where are you going?""

This is why I read stories.

This is why I read YOUR stories.

This is why your stories stick to my memories. Much like Jacques Brel songs.