All Comments on 'Gentelman's Bet'

there's not more to say about this.

Sickening

From anal to vaginal? and she consented to perform in a sudio situation?? very credible

Some people have an issue with the anal sex followed by either vaginal or oral, and I can understand their disgust. I have had a woman that has done both on her own with no reservation, so it's certainly not outside the realm of possibility. However, the fact that this woman would consent to sex with this guy, and have another person film it is just absurd. Not to mention that the deviation from the bet was pointless. Snow wanted to prove the other guy wrong by strictly interpreting the wording of the bet, only to abandon one of the more specifically stated terms. It defeats the entire purpose of the story's premise. The technical aspects of the writing itself were okay (nothing great, but I've seen worse), but the dialog was horrendous. I can forgive the cuckolding aspect, as everyone has their own preferences and turn-ons, but the bottom line is this story was just badly written all around. This was a story whose premise had the potential to be much much better than how it was treated.

She dresses sexy that night. More sexy than she ever has for him. Snow comes in much too late to charm anyone unless it is prearranged. She abandons her husband at the restaurant after dancing when Snow merely says a line or two to her? The van? The camera man? <P>

Please! Snow is cheating on the bet. He obviously has sampled her charms before, and/or at the very least has made a pact with her to do this. Not exactly living up terms of the wager (meet a woman you don't know) is he? Perhaps he figures this was a good way to rub Harris' nose in the fact he was screwing June? <P>

What really astounds me are two things: The lack of outrage from Harris and the disrespect that June is willing to show her husband. To get screwed is one thing, to get screwed on camera knowing that your husband is watching has to be the ultimate. And why is Harris worried about whether she gets home or not. She should be history.<p>

But thanks for sharing. I imagine that the subject matter should unlease a firestorm of comments. Hope you have a thick skin!

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Your story was well written, and tantalizing by the details hinted but not shared. I cannot read the story and believe that June was unaware of the way the evening would end. Harris only mentions a couple of times Snow talked with June while dancing. Somehow I can't imagine a couple comments leading to a romp in the hay--no matter how good a dancer Snow was. To me, June and Snow were working in collusion. What is not told was her motivation. Did Snow convince her that Harris really wanted this to happen? Did Snow convince her that Harris had cheated on her and this was her chance at payback? We will never know.

That leaves me with Harris. His description of his wife leads one to picture a woman who is conservative, though not necessarily prudish. Sexually, she has been very traditional despite Harris's requests for variety. Her dress on the night in question is unusual, but not totally out of keeping, nor is it outlandish. He exhibits a sense of trust in his wife, allowing her to dance with Snow if she chooses, never believing that Snow was even thinking of continuing the bet. The lack of emotion in his response does not bother me. Harris is a lawyer. He could well be extremely analytical and skilled at not allowing emotions to cloud his thinking in legal matters. The fact that he hoping that June "makes it safely home" does not necessarily mean that he is willing to be a "happy cuckold." Far be it.

As a lawyer he would be well skilled at "keeping his powder dry" until the proper point in the battle. So what does Harris do in a half-hour or so when he is confronted with his wife? In my story he has a suitcase at the door and orders her to fill it up and be out of the house within 60 minutes or he'll throw her out. She might argue, "But Harris, I thought..." His response might be, "When did I ever give you grounds to believe that I would.../wanted you to..." He would then tell her, "I did not provoke the kind of behavior you exhibited. I do not condone it, and I will not stand for it. Get a lawyer, I want a divorce." June would either unload her gunnysack of complaints or cry at having been set up by Snow.

In my reading, the latter case would be met with a legalistic, "If Snow tried to convince you of... (or made you think that I...), then you should have come to me and talked. That's what people do when they love each other. You didn't. You don't. So goodbye and don't let the door hit you on the way out."

Well written stylistically. It made me think and it made me imagine "what happened next." That is at least one sign of a good story.

Predictable and stupid.....

... a friend and co-worker doesn't make for a good story, it makes for one dead half-spic. No man is going to react like the stupid husband in your story, and no wife is going to leave her husband alone for that long without all hell breaking loose. "Too stupid," is about all I can say for your story.

As a wise man once said never trust your co-workers or best friends! Well written but I cant help thinking that somebody who had made this bet and lost would not have the wife back in the house.

that it gets NO rating because it is less than zero. You can't even develop a reasonable fantasy. Give it up, joker, and quit wasting our time. They won't let us rate it without at least a zero, so you get that, lucky.

First the seduction wager is to old to be a high interest erotic story. It has been played to death over my wife would never and I bet you. Second as pointed out by some of the people before, the wife is dressed to seduce wearing clothes the husband did not even know about. This indicated perhaps that the wife was already in the know and agreed to being fucked. The wife has so little respect and love for her husband she lies to him she is going to the restroom and leaves with is coworker to go to a hotel to be fucked. This is really the deal cincher since she left with the man with the intention to fuck abandoning her husband in the restaurant. The van with the monitor is all set up so he would watch on prearranged video the guy nad his wife in a hotel room. So it is evident the partner intended to bed the wife and had it all arranged. The husband accepts that he lost the bet. The partnership would have to be dissolved since he would every day have to go to work with the man his wife left him for to go screw. That would build slowly over time to what could become a violent outburst. The wife should have come home to find she was no longer considered the wife but was a slut and divorce was planned. He might in that time she was gone have changed the locks on the property and moved her belongings out on the door stoop. The divorce petition should have charged adultry and named his partner as the co-adulterer with the wife. Finally his partner should be filed against in a civil claim for breaking up his marriage. Personally, myself I would have tossed the wife in the street when she got home and informed my partner if I ever saw him again anywhere I would personally end all chances of him ever having sex with any woman again. So many ways to make a persons life hell. Put a potato in the exhaust pipe and shove it deep in with a broomstick. Order chairs and tables for a funeral to be set up in his yard while he is away. Order massive quantities of food catered for the funeral or party. Another good thing is to order all of the special movie packages and sporting events to be put on his cable service. Call a fumigating service and have his home fumigated while he is at work. I will leave it to others to suggest other nonviolent things. For the wife the best deal is to go and hock all of her jewerly and other belongings.

This story is original and not too badly written, I'll give it that. But a story needs to hold together, to have some credibility and logic. Harris indicates he fantasized a bit about a strange man doing his wife, but that it was only fantasy and he certainly did not want to make it reality. Snow obviously cheated; if there were a lot of money at stake, I could understand it, but we are not given enough background to support a serious conflict between Harris and Snow such that Snow would want to hurt and humiliate Harris, so the logic escapes me. June must have set Harris up, again we don't know any background but obviously she wants to put him down. I think a part 2 is really needed; this story can't stand on its own. How would Harris and Snow be able to work together in the future? Snow would really need to watch his back as I'm sure an enemy in the firm will not be good for him. I think June should meet the pavement very quickly. We really know little about the characters other than Snow is sneaky and unscrupulous -- of course, many people fit that description and certainly lots of lawyers do -- a fitting next chapter could include June's getting at least three separate STD's from her little sexcapade. ATM, ATV, pretty risky don't you think?

As someone else noted, the "bet you can't seduce my wife" thing is pretty tired; and in this story, it's not really a "twist" that he ends up seducing the guy's wife - you can see it coming from the start.

And about this whole "anal-to-vaginal" thing. That's a serious no-no to anyone with any degree of sexual awareness. The bacteria in the rectum are very bad ju-ju for the vaginal and more often than not will cause one hell of a nasty infection in the vagina.

So ... low points for all of that.

But it IS a first effort, and you do know how to construct a sentence ... so keep submitting stories, and maybe work with one of the knowledgable editors here at Literotica. I'd read more of your stuff, just to see how you progress.

Either here or on another site. No one is this stupid, also I don't know about anyone else but if my friend and partner even suggested this we would be done. Anyone who fucks around with their marriage is a dumb ass.

Loved the writing style, loved the storyline, loved the characters. Am I missing something, isn't this supposed to be erotic fantasy? Then ,who are all these critics?

I appreciate all the comments, good or bad.

There are several things about this story that need work and as my first effort I felt that I needed to post it before I picked it to death and left it unseen.

I wasn't my intent to "surprise" anyone with Snow's actions. It should have been quite obvious what was going to happen.

And this is pure fantasy so I took some liberties with reality.

I personally have never engaged in anal sex and was naive to the health issues. I'll keep that in mind for any other stories I post.

The typo's and misspellings are frustrating. No matter how many times you check there are still there.

If you did like it, thank you.

If you didn't like it, I will endeavor to do better next time.

and no sign of any 'gentleman' (or should I say 'gentelman' - it always irritates when there's a spelling error in the title!)

I liked the mystery of not having all the answers. I hope someone does a follow-up story after the fact.

it never came to be.

First, when making a wager lawyers are never this naive. Period. Given that, the ending was rather a let down. How much better would have been if on their meeting the next day:

-- He informed Snow that his wife was HIV positive and he should have used a condom.

--He informed Snow that he van had a mysterious accident and had been burned to a total loss. Several hundreds of thousands of dollars I was told. The fire Captain was able to tracked down the owner, a shady bookmaker with a violent reputation. BTW, the bookmaker was on his way up to the office right now.

--He blew Snow's brains out.

--Anything would have been better.

is an illogical fallacy. TK U MLJ LV NV

No plot, no character development, no ending...

It may appeal to some but the prose is so deadly boring and the concept so hackneyed that this isn't worth the read.

Sad

One star.

then kill the motherfucker who twisted the bet, preferably by caving his smug face in with an aluminum baseball bat until it's nothing but bloody pulp.

The "bet you can't" is a pretty safe one to start with.

First flaw no stakes.

You got yourself stuck with the whisper on the dance floor. You needed to come up with SOME kind of line. "Your husband bet me $1000 I couldn't seduce you. What will it take to prove him wrong?" "I've got a 10' dick." -- SOMETHING!

Another tack: hubby realized she's the mark. Now what happens.

Another tack: van video was a ruse, bad lighting at hotel, but hubby sees name, rushes there, wife actually at office.

Alt ending: Snow admits "OK you won, but it was fun losing" Something like that.

I hope he recorded the show and visited a lawyer and divorced her next day. When she came home locked her out and told the slut to go back to Snow. But I bet the closet cuckold didn't

One of the HOTTEST i've had the pleasure of reading. This is the fifth time in two years and it Never gets old. I stil get absorbed into the story even though I've already read it multiple times. Great Job !!

I'd have dialed up Guido and had Snow meet a tragic accident. Then shit-canned the bitch.

men like snow are easy to eliminate, i loved to fuck up men like snow . I knew one in the Navy a had mercy on his soul . I could have set him on fire after i drenched him in lighter fluid and flicked my lighter, He turn out to be a real pussy .he cried .

its good when your wife gets a great fuck

For some reason this made me angry! One cannot work with a person devoid of ethics and such low morals...same with the wife! Both are gone!!

If he stays with them he has NO reason to be a man.

DD