All Comments on 'Getting Down at Brown Ch. 03'

Them spending time with her family is something I shall enjoy very much, not something I was expecting to happen so soon but anxious nonetheless. Talking about marriage is the second thing that got me riled up and them sneaking about it just because their moms asked was actually quite fun, as was the other girls prying into their intimate life. This should be a fun holiday to see to the end and hopefully drive this series a lot further.

5* with ease!

This is a place where Sheila grew up and was most comfortable and this can open the floodgates for anyone to be most confident to try things they have never tried before. Just a wonderful chapter.

Actually getting married is far too soon but nothung wrong with discussing something that will happen in the future.

Looking forward to the next chapter. Do you have an ETA?

Not sure when it will be approved, but it was submitted today.

Scheduled to appear tomorrow.

So are we.

Spring break up North with her family is way different from South Padre island.

Early in chapter one, I noticed narration was used in places where dialog would have enhanced the telling. It came to me again when the story reported the gist of Sheila's call to her parents; meanwhile I was thinking that I would have liked to hear the actual words she reported to Max, ie. dialog.

However, shortly after, comes a sterling example of dialog, as Max overhears the 4 girls in his dorm room discussing sex and marriage. Very clever plot device and clever construction of dialog.

Another chapter of obvious progression

in an obviously 5 star story.

Paul in Oklahoma

Fantastic so far. Amazingly good.

Bill S.