by thiscouldbtricky
You had me intensely reading and want more. I hope you will share part 2 soon.
A great story so far. Not only does it have all of the erotic and sexual elements to make you wet or hard...it also opens up the uncertainty women feel at the possible beginning of a relationship. Can't wait for the next chapter.
It really is great. Teasing words hooking me in and your imagery pulling and tugging that line in. Not over sexed at all. Classy.
Loved all the monologue. .. my kind of writing. Very hot.
That was really good! Great descriptions without being too detailed, and a plausible (and hot) storyline. I can't wait to hear what's coming next!
Great start - I'm hooked - give us some twists and turns and keep cranking up the heat.
Nice story! clear and concise, you could feel the heat. It left you on the edge for chapter two.
I really like this story. You keep it simple, it's not overwritten. Just your quiet, succulent descriptions. We all wish we were there with you-- but then that would ruin the story.
What a build up...such great description of physical and mental feelings! I wanted to be there to help you through it :)
I loved your descriptions and your honesty...the self doubt, the need, the lust, the humour.
Next chapter please?
Lots of words come to mind as a result of reading this --
honest / articulate / insightful / powerful / funny / intense / arousing / satisfying / exciting / teasing / original / memorable / fluent
-- but the one which stands out most of all is:
Assured.
You've presumably been too busy these past seven years, penning best-selling novels for a different audience. In which case:
Welcome back. And thanks. And. . . please don't leave it another seven years for chapter two.
love love love the comparison of the heat inside of you compared to magma beneath a volcano. This one will be in my thoughts tonight, and no doubt at work tomorrow! thanx