by pointless
Nice background and excellent lead in. Overall a great erotic story.
Very well done. I tend to avoid anything more than two pages but this just kept me going and going. Even the long lead in was engaging.
Very well written and erotic, especially the part between the struggle on the bed and the first kiss.
5 stars isn't enough. Keep writing, your amazing at it. I was really into your build up. Perfect in every way.
Almost there. It was a fine plot overall, but the marijuana references didn't seem consistent with two characters that were too reserved to admit attractions earlier than they were revealed. The joint references seemed thrown in there to try to sound cool rather than as a settles part of the story.
Not gonna lie if you were to turn this into a proper story like 50 shades of grey it would be great and I would buy your book