All Comments on 'Gift from Outer Space Ch. 03'

I just read over this and it just doesn't look like I was awake when I was proofreading. Skimming it, I felt like everything was getting jumbled. The pronouns "she" and "her" are your worst enemy when writing about lesbians in a relationship.

Anyway this story and all my others will have to be resubmitted. No new chapters for a while.

on yourself--we all make mistakes! I'm enjoying your writing.

I like this story, and I'm far more concerned with the concept and content of the story then technical writing issues. For those who are concerned with the "correctness" of the written word - why don't you offer to do some editing. That would be far more constructive.

errors in spelling and syntax detract overall from the reading experience. I don't blame people who are turned off by errors. Me, I spot them right away.

This particular episode is more than that though. I think it has whole passages that just need to go. Maybe my other stories just have a wrong word or two, an awkward paragraph at worst. But this last one has to get reworked top to bottom. Stat. Don't worry, it won't change the direction that I take this story though, as I've already begun writing the next chapter. Whether you like that or not, I can't be certain. I hope you and many others do enjoy it.

Can't wait for part 4. Keep up the great writing.