All Comments on 'Gina & Ron Enjoy Night of Sex'

This is a narrative, a description of a scene, told in the third person in a play by play form. A, then B, followed by C, and so forth until they both fall asleep. Very predictable and therefore inherently not too interesting, although the language, syntax, and grammar are done in a workman like fashion. There is no plot, just a description of the action. There is no dialogue. The characters, as little as we know about them, are static. Good first effort, though, so please keep writing.

Your story sure turned me on.. It reminded me of the first time my wife fingered my ass, unsure of how far she should go.