by LanceNevada
Started promising but faded once they got physical.
BTW, there is no way a female body builder in competition trim could get her mouth anywhere near her nipple.
You made Gina's dialogue stilted to make her more foreign and thus exotic. However, it came across as simply annoying. The wam-bam fast pacing worked. The physically overpowering female was sexy. Your closing paragraph was a bit melodramatic, the whole nothing else matters is worn thin. To have him excited but fearful would have fit better. Don't have him magically loose himself to her. Give us a taste of his emotional change over.