All Comments on 'Ginger Moves Overseas Ch. 07'

Mr lovey-dovey, how cute and warm?

I love this hottest chapter yet next to the stairwell in chap 2.

So glad that you finally got his cock in you. It's what you deserve

I liked the style you chose offering two different POVs of the scene. I think that's a pretty unique and under-utilized approach other than the typical 1st person or 3rd party omnipotent style.

But in regards to the actual 'sex act' itself....eh, I was a little under whelmed. You did a great job setting the scene, expressing the thoughts of the participants, and generating realistic dialogue, but I really didn't feel like I was reading an event that was unfurling. Instead it was more like watching the 5min 'clip' version of a 30min full adult movie.

Again, def is good, but I would love to see more of the aspects fleshed out and with more detail to what is actually occuring. I realize this is unsolicited and solely my opinion, but yea, just thought I would offer my constructive criticism. Treat it as you will.