All Comments on 'Girl on Girl Surprise'

Great story, this is my fantasy. Write more would love to read them and well you know!!!

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Good fantasy wth lots of erotic action, if a bit unrealistic in terms of the number of repeat orgasms. I especially enjoyed the images of the girlfriend masturbating herself.

Not a bad story but there were lots of grammatical errors and spelling errors. In addition, several errors on duplication of words. Next time have someone proof read it before you submit it.

The erros took away from the story and made it difficult to read.

The story needs a read through and some editing. Apart from that it's a nice idea and well told. Personally I'd like to read a little more background and some description of their emotions. I'm not sure what I'd do in his place, but within fantasy it's as hot as hell. Maybe we could have another part with her making him do even more humiliating things. Best of both worlds here.