All Comments on 'Girl On The Beach'

Excellent story, but the clever last line of dialog was a real contest winner. Hope you find a "last line contest" to enter. This one is definitely a winner, written from her POV.

Why not write a sequel, starting from his POV, then expand the story with a stop in the woods enroute home and a hot scene in the back seat. She asked for an encore, didn't she? So, how can Ray refuse her invitation?

title says it all - a problem with "first time" stories like this is that while they are often very good stroke stories, they lack a back story, and so often it is the back story which is the most interesting and erotic of a seduction, rather than its final consumation

None of your stories disappoint. I love the twists and last liners that you often include.

I was starting to arc up at the impending non-consent/rape and then Teresa came of age. Wasn't she lucky her first suited her so well.

Good job Ashson.