All Comments on 'Girlfriends Younger Sister'

Never, never put yourself first. It's not Me and whoever, it's whoever and I.

No way would he pull out just shot his cum deep up inside her pussy

Numerous grammar and punctuation errors and that's just in the first paragraph. Didn't bother with the rest.

Don't worry about the haters here. I liked this story because it was simple and realistic, not full of the egotistical inch-measurements and loud orgasms plot formulae of so many stories here. If you really like writing these stories (if it makes you feel better to do so), learn from comments but never let them get you down. If, on the other hand, you have other talents and interests that make you feel even better about yourself, do those things. Cheers.

This could have been a great story, but you need to work on your grammar. Have a friend help you edit the story next time.

I don't see any Stories on here from any of those making comments ~~ I guess they they are jealous of your story and had to vent somewhere today.!** Keep on writing and do your homework and you will only get better as time goes on. "4" 4-U Thx.

....or true stories to share. But before either of those, they need basic grammar skills.

Fact or fiction, your story lacks the basics. It's "all over the map," is missing words, and has horrible grammar. Yes, you need an editor, but first you need a knowledge of grammar!

I have written a couple of stories on this site, so my qualifications to make comments, per "tendernsweet2" rules, are valid and intact.

Please note that "tendernsweet2," not having written a single story, does NOT qualify to comment, pro or con!

Give him come sexy chest hair! hat will be a turn on for Allison!