All Comments on 'Girls like Girls'

Great story and the moral is...

BTW, happy Fathers Day.

Sincerely,

Santacruzman

thank you for such a loving story. really looking forward to more of your writing.

Hope to read more from you.

5 Stars.

Great job.

Bravo, one of the best stories I've ever read. One those that your sad to reach the end of.

This is a great story. It felt like I knew the people in it and left me me wanting to be friends with them all. Well all but one. There will always be one in every crowd, one close minded moronic bigot. Every time I read one of your stories it just leaves wanting more.

I love the Princess Bride, I felt like I could be friends with both of the characters. Love the story...little long for my taste but it is so worth it! More shower sex please! And send the ladies my way would ya!

There's a webcomic; the main character works up the nerve to tell her friends that she's bi (up till then she's been in a relationship with another girl).

"Turns out they all knew before I did. There's nothing like a chorus of 'Christ, finally!' to take the wind out of your sails..."

... just for The Princess Bride references alone!

Love it.

I appreciated the buildup and the character development. Any story can whimsically jump into sex straight away. But this let us fall in love with the characters as they realized their love for each other. Related, while one girl was trans, this fact wasn't the entire plot of the story. This is like my dream queer trans lesbian relationship and thank you so much for supplying a very thin market, lol

Terrific story and I like how you tied in the song.

I read this story because I met the author in the chat lobby and liked that person. Since i have recently started writing myself, i often desire to read other peoples works as well. Well, this story was an eye opener for me. This story is really well crafted, and its a love story, and it has a well thought out ending. The characters and dialogue seem real, so I ended up caring about the characters. This writer did a great job, handling not just the love scenes, but the sex scenes as well. The tension between the two characters is very tangible and realistic leading up to their eventual get together. I am giving this story five stars.

having read this a few times now i have to say what a beautiful story , thank you so much for sharing this. being trans my self and just starting to come out this really means so much, to read such a well written story. much love to you.xoxo

I enjoyed your story. And stories. I rarely comment on stories and do so only when there's merit in the writing. So, please take the following as, albeit tangential, a compliment. This is also a way to think through my own thoughts.

I have a general problem with fiction that reads like a film script. There are points where you have your characters doing stuff that doesn't give us any insight into their character. Something like: 'While she wondered whether her friend wanted to kiss, she put away the dishes'. This last clause gives us a visual but doesn't add anything to the story. It's filmesque. Fiction doesn't need it. It is extraneous, and particularly in short fiction every clause should be essential.

Don't you start off with physical description as well? A vast majority of stories here do. Again, this is over-weighing of the visual, which is also filmesque. What picture do we want to have of our characters? I think it is more the desirability of the paramours to each other rather than some 'objective' description of a cliched beauty. It's not the reader's desire we are trying to elicit as much as the reader's eros through the desire of our characters. Film leans on physical beauty. Fiction is not so limited. It can step into the character's personality, psyche, desire complexes and in so doing fire up the reader who participates in the passions of the character. And you do this quite well, including odd little idiosyncrasies that flesh out your characters for us.

You also indulge from time to time unneeded adverbs and adjectives. "...practically dripping over her cock...." I suppose "dripping" is metaphorical, but you don't need to include "practically" for it to make sense. A small and easily corrected thing. Again, efficiency is always a virtue in writing; particularly so in short stories.

One of many cool things in this story is the chance to use the phrase "her cock." It hits the reader from a slant, which is a good thing. Tension, frission adds to the drama.

Thanks again for the writing. I look forward to reading more of your work.

I loved your story, just romance and true love .. I am a softy for a romance story where true love overcomes all ..

Romantic, sweet and excellently written