All Comments on 'Gloria'

the story needs a chapter two. that jason moves on a finds someone new.

Even though no one in the story was married the aspect of Gloria cheating on John allows the story to fold itself very nicely into the Loving Wives category. Well written and well executed.

The author is a professional at writing and we are, so to speak, recipients of his talent. It's a fun story and has reached a stage in which this 'Loving Wives' story turns serious - at least that's my take. I'd assume she did not accept stipends on her scholarship being the daughter of a billionaire and the sole beneficiary(?). RAG

I don't believe it!

Considering all the hearts he broke before he met her, it's poetic justice. You write very well. Thanks!

"The author is a professional at writing..."

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Are you kidding me? This idiot makes mistakes a ten year old should know to avoid, such as knowing to start EVERY paragraph of contiguous quoted text with a quotation mark. This is not amateur writing, it's amateurish writing.

I would have given it a hundred with a happy ending.

The previous commenter from the Unreal World is a jealous writer who couldn't carry an author's jock - and doesn't need one.<P>

A story of life and it's complexity.<P>

You are looked forward to Author.<P>

With High Regard

The list is long that explains why they should not marry: but the most important one is the one she insisted on: honesty. She was a liar. He feels bad and maybe he loved her, but at some point he will think about the relationship and realize that her feelings were selfish and that she used him for her own pleasure and need. I am impressed with your writing on this one and liked how the college boy became a man as he learned to love. I know author's do not like follow ups, but if he were my character I would write how he takes his lesson to heart, and goes out to have a life: wife, children, and career. And how she became what she chose to become: a whore for her family, a belonging to be traded. She makes it sound like a big sacrifice, but she in fact had a choice: love or money. Now he has a choice: die or go out and live his life. He is the better person if he will stop and think about it: and you think about that other story. Maybe they could cross paths 20 years later and she can see what she really missed out on.

I agree with Simple49er.You should write a second chapter showing twenty years later what Gloria missed change love for money.

Easy enough to walk into a wedding and make your case. Then let the girl decide. This guy is an all round coward. He deserved to lose the girl he loved.

For me it is complete. I recognize the symmetry of their maneuvers and the interesting twist of the fiancée not even being pissed off even though he did qualify the relation as an affair.. Thanks WM1

For me it is complete. I recognize the symmetry of their maneuvers and the interesting twist of the fiancée not even being pissed off even though he did qualify the relation as an affair.. Thanks WM1

LOL. The famous Mystery could've wrote this story the way you incorporated his PUA tactics. Good job.

Once again well written and a good read.

It's obvious you belong to the "torch the bitch" crowd. Why does it bother you how well the author writes a story. Isn't this an amateur erotic site, where very few are professional writers, if any. This is a site to read stories for your erotic entertainment, or is there another reason you're here.<p>Noticed that the loving wives genre seems to attract the negative critics, one doesn't see them on any other genre. Wonder why?

What a silly ass storyline give us a break.

Compared to what he was hoping to have--a smart beatiful girl of his dreams and $millions, no doubt he was miserable. Nevertheless, he still made out like a bandit. Not only did he get to fuck Gloria, he got a $50,000 Corvette, an apartment for a year, worth two or three thousand a month, and some expensive gifts. Therefore, he had a very good year.

Her affairs didn't seem to bother John and Gloria's much. Could the very rich have different beliefs and standards? Perhaps it is about maintaining wealth within the families and well bred children, and the other is just a little fun.

Because DWannabe gave it a five.

AND BED. And then she left me, TK U MLJ LV NV

Another lame ending. Your stories start pretty well but you seem to run out of steam and not finish them well.

This had an uncommon story line and it was well developed. The lead characters, at least to me, came across as emotionally shallow and they got the ending they deserved. Well done and thanks for sharing your work.

and goodbye yellow brick road. TK U MLJ LV NV

A player gets played. The real fiancé is a cuck who married the cheating slut.

What the fuck? On to ch.2

But you never really explained why Gloria HAD to marry John? In this day and age? Forced or arranged marriages aren't really commonplace in the good old USA. SO while it made for an interesting story, it also made for an implausible one. Wouldn't his research have told him there was a husband to be in the wings? And what about showing up at the wedding and creating a stink? What about going to the press and creating a stink? Like all guys, I'm sure he probably had some video on his I-phone of them making love. Maybe he could convince her to marry him instead? Interesting story, it simply didn't go far enough.

She deserves her cuck husband.

Jason, don't have anything to do with this cunt, don't take a fucking thing from her, not one single gift. She is everything wrong with humankind.

as always you have a good story where the player gets played.

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

If terrible and tragic for the emotions.

I have more respect for a player than a prostitute of the heart.

Gloria is scum.

I abhore players-selfish,arrogant and cruel

Not sure what ''prostitute of the heart is'' I have known a number of women ehose circumstances led them to be working girls. Thought them delightful-One I adored as no other

He wasn't sure if he really loved Gloria so why is he holding torch for her two years later. He had very expensive clothes, a cherry classic Corvette, a ritzy apartment for a year, and had very successful history with females.

Mope for a few months, then back to the hunt.

that sucked. Sometimes you feel the urge to kick puppies too? Or maybe you are just waiting till the last moment to save this in Ch 2?

This is a little different for you. I enjoyed it, although all the characters are flawed. He has the Corvette, and is good with women, so move on. Chapter two should be good.

Duplicitous damned women! John was a cuck even before he married the bitch.

Very entertaining read. Thanks for sharing.

No, no and no! Don't ever give up!

What is it about men with little um, self esteem, that requires them to call everybody a cuck?? I swear to God if my husband ever said that about another guy I would first smack the shit out of him and then ask where the man I married was. The only men that spend all their time whining about what other men do are insecure and pathetic.

EOR

Sometimes that's how life is. I enjoyed the read. Thank you!

Good one! Sad though. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

First off, sit with John in room until Gloria finishes her shower and have a 3 way talk. 2, drive up to her parent's house and become a nuisance.

Personally I'd have taken the 5K if just to show the lying bitch how little she was worth.

Why is it that the World we live has lost its fucking mind. where your value is overvalued. There are 4 billion women in the and for some reason 3.99 billion think they are so special that their shit does stink. And if you don’t agree with their view of themselves. Then you’re a misogynist, broke or your fragile male ego is to. But how about this, you’re just a self absorbed fat little troll that has been lied to. You aren’t the “10” you think you are but the at best “4”. Low self esteem and any of the other nomenclatures that are heaped upon men for having boundaries or this thing called common sense. The M/C is a willing cuckold and it is what it is.

Interesting, but some explanation of "do my duty" really is called for. Was it a financial debt, social standing, or what?