All Comments on 'Goblins' Rise Ch. 02'

In addition to smaller mistakes, you call the wife both Rebecca and Gwendolyn, and you switch in and out of flashbacks and viewpoints with no indication that you're doing so.

Your overall story arch is good, and your scenes although a bit rough at times are entertaining. However, as the other comment mentions you would benefit greatly from an editor. You have many typos and storyline inconsistencies.

I like the over all concept. But there are spelling errors, the plot holes, the parts that don't make any sense.

Plus I hate when the guy is perfect and the best at everything

is there a chapter 3 in the future? I enjoyed this sure some mistakes but hey cant get perfection all the time, and well this is free and i dont see no point in complaining

Very nice. Although I would have enjoyed reading more about the wife becoming the group's new sex slave, fucking the goblins and the lizard men.