All Comments on 'Going For It'

Good story.Needs a continuation so we can find out what happens.

I'm looking forward to what happens next. Don't stop now :D

Could Vinny have shucked out of his costume and into his brother's in record time?

Unlikely that she would have mistaken his voice. You ought to edit your spelling/grammar - misspelled or incorrectly used words are distracting.

Sure, a few minor typos here and there, but the overall writing style was very clear and crisp. You have a very natural way with dialogue. I'm pretty sure it was Vinny in his brother's borrowed costume. He is the one who coined the nickname Shelby, and I wouldn't be surprised to learn he's had a crush on her since they were kids. The sex scene was short but very hot, and the part that got to me? When he cuddled her against him afterward. I really hope you do a follow up, but if this is a stand alone, it's still very good. The reader can use their imagination any way they wish.

This story was hot, sexy, emotional with the added spice of a cliffhanger for an ending. What's not to like? Good luck in the contest!

And I'm hoping that there will be a follow-up to this story. I'd like to know who was the reaper as well as if there are any consequences because of this encounter.

I really liked it. I dont personally think it needs to be Vinny for halloween it could have been death she encountered I like the mystery.