by DataGrowth
I really enjoy your writing style. You convey your meaning well while adding humorous parts to keep it entertaining. Keep up the writing :)
Slightly longer chapters would be more fun..... But still its fun...
But I went back and read the previous chapters. I too enjoyed the other genie stories and I am glad you are writing this. I am glad Jason asked Melody to be his girlfriend as this adds a romantic element I like. Hopefully you will finish this series unlike so many of the other good genie stories. Keep writing.
Congratulations on what is fast becoming a favourite story of mine. Having quickly read through the first three chapters I can only hope that you are able to continue this series for some time, and soon ;) .
While I agree with the other commenters that slightly longer chapters might be in order, I get the sense that these shorter, easily digestible, chapters are more your style--do whatever feels right, just, please, keep writing this enjoyable and plausible (for fiction) series.
I enjoyed this chapter very much as it highlights the budding relationship between Jason and Melody. I also like how Melody is struggling with her slave mentality and I see a lot of growth there. I also enjoyed seeing more of Dawn. Is she one of the people that Melody mentioned that finds Matt attractive? I hope that you develop that relationship in a positive light, as I don't see her being with Matt just to hurt Jason as a thing she would do. I could be wrong of course but write your story and I will read it. Keep up the great work!
Reminiscent of another Genie series, but fresh enough to enjoy reading. Be careful about stepping on other author's toes (plagiarism) but please do continue your story line. It will be interesting to see how your Jason character develops, and what makes him special enough to have gained his own genie.
Awesome loved it, please keep it going, i love these kind of stories and frankly whenever i find one with potential they just stop... pretty annoying so please keep going :D
I like it. I like the possibilities of the stories and I sort of like the characters. I mean, we haven't really had time to explore their personalities to know if we like them; but so far I think they make sense and are believable enough. The only thing I miss is side characters. The story seems to be too Jason-centred.
Is it too late to get Dawn in the picture? When she went to see him it seemed like you could go in that direction.
Try to make the chapters longer than one page it gets annoying for them to be single pages.
And another one bites the dust. The "Genie Curse" strikes again. Another "author" looses interest in what he/she is writing and they leave the story hanging. Too bad they can't be fined for doing this crap!
Please Please Please continue your story,
Jason has`nt even bonded with melody yet,
and I want to see Matt get his come up ants.
Good job on making the end more of a cliff hanger. keep up the good work please make the chapters a little longer and cant wait to see what happens in the next chapter
i really want 2 read ur next chapter plz i wanna know what happened after melody became his girl friend
Is there even one series about genies on here that is finished?
A year and a half since this was posted, is this going to be ANOTHER genie story that remains unfinished?
Having scads of chapters to my credit i k ow how hard it is to finish a story, but three and done?
Oh well. Maybe he got hit by a bus, or his mother found his notebook.
Sick and tired of all these abandoned stories. Lit needs to include a check box for readers to flag this shit so we can get it kicked off if an author leaves a series Unworked on for over a year.
This face smackers from the hitchhikers guideto the galaxy movie, authors who abandon their published stories should get a smack in the face every day until they finish. Otherwise don't bother. Finish what you start
As it turns out, one of my best friends was murdered around the time that I stopped working on this piece. I'm so fucking sorry that while coping with the major depression that it threw me into, I'd completely forgotten that I had an obligation to revolve my entire life around pleasing people like you, Thelvyner, who hold no consideration of the lives of the authors who go to such lengths to entertain you.
Yes, I finally started to feel better enough to the point that I thought that I would pop back on here to start working on this again, but after realizing how little my efforts even mean to you guys, I don't even know if it want to even try anymore.
Please continue writing. I really liked the story. Would love to read more.
There are some stories that just leave you empty when they end and I had just finished one of them when I found this. I really got into the story and then poof, no more was there to read. This was absolutely amazing and a lot of people should be more appreciative, but, please continue as this story could go many different dorections
Don't know what Thelvyner's problem is. Please continue, story is fantastic and I'm dying to read more.
Just wanted to say that the joke at the very end of this vignette is freaking hysterical. Of course, I wish there were more, but that punchline alone was worth the trip.
It’s been 7 years now. I’m pretty sure no more is coming. Too bad, it was a pretty good start.
Tc
So tell me why i should read this, its not finished not goning to take the time too many lately have No ending