All Comments on 'Good Work Ethic Through Discipline'

What might have been a good story, turned into drivel..... "he, she, I" need more clarification!!

But I gave up after making it about a third of the way into the story.

I dislike second-person stories, and from comments on stories generally it is apparent that many other Literotica readers also dislike them. Second person works well for maintenance manuals and cook books, but rarely for short stories.

As author, you ask me to imagine myself in the place of the character addressed as 'you', and I can't.

Looking through your list of stories, I see that you have used second person more often than not. I find it surprising that one story scored 4.3, so you have had some success. But there are very few stories that received a comment, so you haven't received much feedback.

First person or third person are much more readable.

I hope that's helpful,

Lue

i have never cum so much

Get out

I usually look for porn to give me that thrill but I got that all from your story. Loved it

There is an audience for all types of stories. This got me off.

I came~ I love the degradation. Proper degradation is hard to find on here- most people don't seem to tag it correctly because there are works with 0 dirty talk but call it degrading because of doggy style or something... Smh. 'Worthless little cum wrag' had me *clenching*, a+. The second person isn't typically my preference, and it almost feels like I'm reading someone's sext/roleplay logs, but write however you are comfortable ofc, ignore the haters. It's such a hot fantasy.