by Tio_Narratore
and maybe grammar isn't big here, but when she thinks to herself, it doesn't have to be in quotations. Sounds like she talks to herself- outloud. But obviously, I love the story and I'm a girl who would loved to be dominated more! I think the story also flows quite nice.
Such great fun! Have loved every chapter and am happy that Grandpa let his friends help her get past another barrier. Wonderful!!