All Comments on 'Gratuities'

One of the best short stories I have read here. I like the way your incorporated the past and had the husband tell it while the wife stood by. The poor deliveryman, bet the rest of his day never was quite as good as the morning! lol You show great talent, keep writing.

I've been visiting this site for years, and this is one of the best stories I've read. Bravo!

What an intriguing way to use dialogue to telescope into scene. The dry, intellectual voice of Mark contrasted neatly with the descriptions, though you could even take further liberties with language in your descriptions because of this relatively dry counterpoint. Structurally, beginning in media res is well done, though it would be interesting to use the photos on the computer as a segue into the flashback.

Fairly funning writing, decent humor

Pimp husband gets whore wife laid. What a.story!