by oshaw
This was a painful read the first time. As a revisit and my second time reading, I’m really not too sure why I put myself through it again. A very touching story.
I have been enjoying this author's stories lately. I appreciate this one because so often parents who have lost a child cannot find their way beck to each other. The grief is too intense. But the way the author handles this situation allows for a logical and sweet conclusion. As others have mentioned, I wish this author was still posting on this site. oshaw, I wish you well and hope you are publishing somewhere else.
Sadly I can only give this story 5 stars . Yes it is a tearjerker as it made my eyes water up
This story is incredible, thank you for sharing it with the world. The part where they found Rachel's drawing in the Harry Potter novel literally brought tears to my eyes.
Even after giving your wonderful story 5 stars, I feel like I am cheating you out of the many more stars you deserve
Loved the story.I saw a comment about couples not being able to get back together after the loss of a child, and that's been my experience too. But the way this was written it worked and they found themselves. Yup, my allergies were going too trying to read that last page. I did like page 5 though. ;-)
And to anonymous from 6 days ago, this is more of the kind of loving wives stories we want to read. Sure both parts of the couple cheated emotionally, but not physically like most of the stories in this forum. Thank You for sharing it with us.
Wow. Emotionally drained. One of the nest stories and authors on this site. I do hope he takes the time to read the comments and is encouraged to continue writing.
No entiendo que son estás cosas húmedas que salen de mis ojos, cada vez que leo está obra... Gracias!
Such an emotional tragic story-- losing a young child to Cancer. Burying any child, but a young one especially, has to be the hardest, most traumatic thing for any parent. Though passed on, my parents would know about that. Making matters worse, the huge struggle between Marilyn & Ray, which seemed to deepen as time went on, played it's hurtful head. And in the pit of the biggest sorrow, Rachel's burial, they found one another.
>> I had some problem with the writing, in terms of keeping up with the story, but I think it's my sorry ass & not the author's fault. Otherwise, it had the ability to grasp me inside the story & feel the emotions of the characters. The picture Rachel drew brought tears to my eyes; she seemed to know.
>> Initially, I was going to stop reading, & so happy I didn't. To the author, thank you for such a beautiful story of the spirit & love's resurgence. 5 stars Bob
Incredible absolutely brilliant story. Heart-rending and heart warming at the same time. Laying here in bed with tears in my eyes (yes real men do cry) and feeling emotionally wrung out. Writing of the highest order. Just stunningly brilliant. You batted this one right out if the park and produced one of the very best on here. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. BardnotBard
Still the best story on this site.
In my humble and anonymous opinion, of course.
A story with no nice people. All pretty despicable aside from the dying child. Normally you'd hate on the APs but tbf they're just victims of the self centred mindlessness of the main couple.
Great story, could not hold the tears Bach at the end. Thanks for your writing.
i find this story to be so touching and romantic in its own way. I have shed many tears reading this and do not mind doing so. for me it gives me great peace of mind knowing that I held my mom and dads hands as the took their last breath on this earth and i hope that i do run into them in the afterlife.
Man this hit me like a sledge hammer. My aunt and uncle lived this story. My cousin was 5 at the time. Dude this story f'd me up. This story has made me remember the pain I thought was long buried. Outstanding work.
Should be 5star times 5star for as many times as anyone can count.
Heart searingly painful and thank God they finally broke out of their personal armour and found each other again.
What a magnificently written story. You pulled my heartstrings. I am in your debt for having read this wonderful work.
From my heart I thank you.
All the very best,
Dave
Brilliant! And quite possibly the saddest story I've read on this site. But Rachel's wisdom saved them all. Thank you.
The part where they found the crayon drawing brought literal tears to my eyes.
Well done.
I read this when it first was posted and just found it again. Made my cry, maybe even harder the second time. Thank you for writing it and sharing.
I read this story several years ago. I was a wreck afterwards. I’ve tried to reread it several since but have been unable to finish it. Today I was finally able to read it again completely and I’m exhausted. I’m going to go to my daughter’s house now and give her the biggest hug possible. This is the very best story on Literotica. No holds barred.
I would have to agree, this may be the best story on this site It is the best one I have read here. It really got me.
A child with cancer. Damn you, playing with my heartstrings. And then tragically dying. Goddamn it that's so cruel. No child should have to suffer that and no parent should have to watch their child suffer especially like that.
When they got home and Marilyn went upstairs, then broke down after seeing the crayon drawing in the book, with the stick figure drawings... OK I broke down into tears as well. Fuck that's some powerful stuff. The imagery and the meaning of it. It all hit me at once. Why did Rachel have to die damn it!?
I'm glad they made it through their grief in the end, realized their mistakes, and are now stronger than ever together. It's a tragedy they lost their little angel, but at least they didn't lose everything. They even had a little family and even got a white Christmas. A bittersweet ending, though that's better than most in this category. This story is certainly a powerful one and I'm sure it will be on my mind for some time.
esta historia me partió el alma... no me imagino como padre, que esto le suceda a mi hija
I am truly saddened. Not so much by the amazing sad story; more by the sad fact the writer no longer contributes to this site.
Heavy sigh.
Nothing I can express that has not already been stated. Fiction at its very best...5+ stars...JZK
Its been over a year since my last read; absolutely the most powerful, moving tale written on Lit. Thank you oshaw!
somewhere east of Omaha
Sem dúvida uma história maravilhosa de drama e superação. 5 estrelas ou 1000 lágrimas?
Thank you for this story. My heart is beautifully broken as I read it. It’s everything a story should be.
What a beautiful moving story I bet many readers had a tear in their eyes after reading it. There are many families going through this same trauma unfortunatley and i guess this story would maybe help them in their grief.
I am fortunate to have not gone through losing a child to a disease like cancer but have lost a mother and brother to it. I cannot describe the feelings as you watch them slowly die and you can do nothing to stop it but try to help them cope until the end. 5+
Damn! What a story. Tears of sorrow and joy in my eyes as I type this. Thank you! I might re read this just so I can add an extra 5 star vote to the tally.
Damnonx. Was t asanf spurs, now I wanted this Tory fo.e d. Very glad it ended how it.did. VERY GLAD.
This story deserves way more than 5 stars ! Truly the best I have read here.
This is how you write a story. I felt all the emotions and yes cried at the loss. So glad they didn’t cross the line and reconciled. ***** out of 10 stars
Finally, an RAAC story I can get behind. I don't understand the idiocy of the majority of the RAAC stories on this site. This story will forever by a diamond in the rough of Literotica.
At least 3rd time reading this story, and my 3rd comment. This is my favorite story from one of my favorite authors. If other readers are looking for similar themes I suggest "The Promise" by DreamCloud and my all-time favorite "A little bit of Death" by Slirpuff
This is legitimately a piece of art. It’s insane that a story this good is offered for free.
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‘Grief’ is only rivaled in pure raw emotion by ‘Then Surely We’ and ‘Angels of Bataan.’ I don’t know where Oshaw went, but you’re sorely missed. Goddamned allergy season may have coincidentally struck when the picture was found.
This is just brilliant. It's emotional and heartbreaking and wonderful all at the same time. It is one of the very best on this site. Really should be rewritten by the author as a book and then get filmed. It's that good. BardnotBard
It’s amazing that a picture drawing from a child can communicate so much.. you wonder if Rachael knew that her parents were struggling or not …but I think at the very least we know Rachel knew she wasn’t going to be there forever and she wanted her mommy and daddy to have that picture as a wish and hope for them when she was gone.
One of the best if not the best story on Lit. You Sir are a bard of the highest quality. I tip my hat to you.
One of the best if not the best story on Lit. You Sir are a bard of the highest quality. I tip my hat to you. I copied this from an anonymous below! . Dazzy D it is a perfect example of great writing an emotion!.
Are you kidding me! A guy like me shouldn't be reduced to a tear wiping wuss. What a freaking great story so much of everything. Thank you for not having them physically cheat on one another and allow them to rebuild their marriage. If they had cheated and broke up and they still found that picture their daughter drew I would have lost it and been kicked out of my own house. 5 stars
Wow.gotta try to type through the tears.Thid is THE best story I've ever read on here or any where.true love always wins.The loose of a loved one you never get over.just learn to deal with the heart ache.great story.
I have yet to find another story here that approaches the emotional intensity of this one.
Tears blurred my eyes several times as I read and I felt real dread as the toxic downward spiral of this relationship gained momentum. The joys and sorrows of having and losing a child were described so vividly. The thoughts, emotions and actions of these characters all rang true.
The wedge of Rachel’s dying that drove Ray and Marilyn apart and her passing being the catalyst that reconciled was exquisitely ironic.
This tale is one of my favorites. If I had but one word to describe, it would be Magnifico.
This story is very powerful and examines the emotions of a couple in a desperate situation with a deathly sick child. The emotional strain and the tug of war between competing needs of each person is described very well.
This story is one of the best & intense I've read on Literotica.