All Comments on 'Grief'

it may not be the best ITS just better than the rest!

This story is very powerful and examines the emotions of a couple in a desperate situation with a deathly sick child. The emotional strain and the tug of war between competing needs of each person is described very well.

This story is one of the best & intense I've read on Literotica.

One of the most bed story’s on this site. RIP

I have yet to find another story here that approaches the emotional intensity of this one.

Tears blurred my eyes several times as I read and I felt real dread as the toxic downward spiral of this relationship gained momentum. The joys and sorrows of having and losing a child were described so vividly. The thoughts, emotions and actions of these characters all rang true.

The wedge of Rachel’s dying that drove Ray and Marilyn apart and her passing being the catalyst that reconciled was exquisitely ironic.

This tale is one of my favorites. If I had but one word to describe, it would be Magnifico.

Wow.gotta try to type through the tears.Thid is THE best story I've ever read on here or any where.true love always wins.The loose of a loved one you never get over.just learn to deal with the heart ache.great story.

Whew! A tearjerker, Thanks

Are you kidding me! A guy like me shouldn't be reduced to a tear wiping wuss. What a freaking great story so much of everything. Thank you for not having them physically cheat on one another and allow them to rebuild their marriage. If they had cheated and broke up and they still found that picture their daughter drew I would have lost it and been kicked out of my own house. 5 stars

One of the best if not the best story on Lit. You Sir are a bard of the highest quality. I tip my hat to you. I copied this from an anonymous below! . Dazzy D it is a perfect example of great writing an emotion!.

One of the best if not the best story on Lit. You Sir are a bard of the highest quality. I tip my hat to you.

It’s amazing that a picture drawing from a child can communicate so much.. you wonder if Rachael knew that her parents were struggling or not …but I think at the very least we know Rachel knew she wasn’t going to be there forever and she wanted her mommy and daddy to have that picture as a wish and hope for them when she was gone.

This is just brilliant. It's emotional and heartbreaking and wonderful all at the same time. It is one of the very best on this site. Really should be rewritten by the author as a book and then get filmed. It's that good. BardnotBard

This is legitimately a piece of art. It’s insane that a story this good is offered for free.

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‘Grief’ is only rivaled in pure raw emotion by ‘Then Surely We’ and ‘Angels of Bataan.’ I don’t know where Oshaw went, but you’re sorely missed. Goddamned allergy season may have coincidentally struck when the picture was found.

Nen gets Stronger after death

At least 3rd time reading this story, and my 3rd comment. This is my favorite story from one of my favorite authors. If other readers are looking for similar themes I suggest "The Promise" by DreamCloud and my all-time favorite "A little bit of Death" by Slirpuff

Finally, an RAAC story I can get behind. I don't understand the idiocy of the majority of the RAAC stories on this site. This story will forever by a diamond in the rough of Literotica.

This is how you write a story. I felt all the emotions and yes cried at the loss. So glad they didn’t cross the line and reconciled. ***** out of 10 stars

👍👍👍👍👍👍👍💯💯💯💯💯💯♥️✝️🙏🤷😁🍕🍕🍕🍺🍺🍺🍕

Classic.

This story deserves way more than 5 stars ! Truly the best I have read here.

If I could give 10 stars I would thank you

Darren

This story made my eyeballs a little sweaty. Well done.

Damnonx. Was t asanf spurs, now I wanted this Tory fo.e d. Very glad it ended how it.did. VERY GLAD.

Damn! What a story. Tears of sorrow and joy in my eyes as I type this. Thank you! I might re read this just so I can add an extra 5 star vote to the tally.

What a beautiful moving story I bet many readers had a tear in their eyes after reading it. There are many families going through this same trauma unfortunatley and i guess this story would maybe help them in their grief.

I am fortunate to have not gone through losing a child to a disease like cancer but have lost a mother and brother to it. I cannot describe the feelings as you watch them slowly die and you can do nothing to stop it but try to help them cope until the end. 5+

Thank you for this story. My heart is beautifully broken as I read it. It’s everything a story should be.

Sem dúvida uma história maravilhosa de drama e superação. 5 estrelas ou 1000 lágrimas?

Its been over a year since my last read; absolutely the most powerful, moving tale written on Lit. Thank you oshaw!

somewhere east of Omaha

Stunning.

Grief beyond belief.

You sure hit some triggers.

5 stars x 100 from Xluckylee

Wonderful.. just wonderful

some time five stars is not enough

Nothing I can express that has not already been stated. Fiction at its very best...5+ stars...JZK

I am truly saddened. Not so much by the amazing sad story; more by the sad fact the writer no longer contributes to this site.

Heavy sigh.

esta historia me partió el alma... no me imagino como padre, que esto le suceda a mi hija

What a story! hmmm

Now that was a true tear-jerker, but great. Thanks for a Christmas Story!

A child with cancer. Damn you, playing with my heartstrings. And then tragically dying. Goddamn it that's so cruel. No child should have to suffer that and no parent should have to watch their child suffer especially like that.

When they got home and Marilyn went upstairs, then broke down after seeing the crayon drawing in the book, with the stick figure drawings... OK I broke down into tears as well. Fuck that's some powerful stuff. The imagery and the meaning of it. It all hit me at once. Why did Rachel have to die damn it!?

I'm glad they made it through their grief in the end, realized their mistakes, and are now stronger than ever together. It's a tragedy they lost their little angel, but at least they didn't lose everything. They even had a little family and even got a white Christmas. A bittersweet ending, though that's better than most in this category. This story is certainly a powerful one and I'm sure it will be on my mind for some time.

I would have to agree, this may be the best story on this site It is the best one I have read here. It really got me.

Brilliant piece of writing. 5 stars. 👏

I read this story several years ago. I was a wreck afterwards. I’ve tried to reread it several since but have been unable to finish it. Today I was finally able to read it again completely and I’m exhausted. I’m going to go to my daughter’s house now and give her the biggest hug possible. This is the very best story on Literotica. No holds barred.

Simply fantastic

One of the best reads on this sight. Good work buddy.

This story, a work of art! 5 stars

I read this when it first was posted and just found it again. Made my cry, maybe even harder the second time. Thank you for writing it and sharing.

The part where they found the crayon drawing brought literal tears to my eyes.

Well done.

Brilliant! And quite possibly the saddest story I've read on this site. But Rachel's wisdom saved them all. Thank you.

Heart rending. And beautiful.

Top-of-the line story about the human condition and struggles.... kudos!

What a magnificently written story. You pulled my heartstrings. I am in your debt for having read this wonderful work.

From my heart I thank you.

All the very best,

Dave

Should be 5star times 5star for as many times as anyone can count.

Heart searingly painful and thank God they finally broke out of their personal armour and found each other again.

Man this hit me like a sledge hammer. My aunt and uncle lived this story. My cousin was 5 at the time. Dude this story f'd me up. This story has made me remember the pain I thought was long buried. Outstanding work.

i find this story to be so touching and romantic in its own way. I have shed many tears reading this and do not mind doing so. for me it gives me great peace of mind knowing that I held my mom and dads hands as the took their last breath on this earth and i hope that i do run into them in the afterlife.

Second time reading this and it still brings tears. Fantastic story.

WOW JUST FANTASTIC

Great story, could not hold the tears Bach at the end. Thanks for your writing.

Very emotional ! Well written

A story with no nice people. All pretty despicable aside from the dying child. Normally you'd hate on the APs but tbf they're just victims of the self centred mindlessness of the main couple.

Still the best story on this site.

In my humble and anonymous opinion, of course.

Incredible absolutely brilliant story. Heart-rending and heart warming at the same time. Laying here in bed with tears in my eyes (yes real men do cry) and feeling emotionally wrung out. Writing of the highest order. Just stunningly brilliant. You batted this one right out if the park and produced one of the very best on here. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. BardnotBard

Out fucking standing! I cried like a baby.

Such an emotional tragic story-- losing a young child to Cancer. Burying any child, but a young one especially, has to be the hardest, most traumatic thing for any parent. Though passed on, my parents would know about that. Making matters worse, the huge struggle between Marilyn & Ray, which seemed to deepen as time went on, played it's hurtful head. And in the pit of the biggest sorrow, Rachel's burial, they found one another.

>> I had some problem with the writing, in terms of keeping up with the story, but I think it's my sorry ass & not the author's fault. Otherwise, it had the ability to grasp me inside the story & feel the emotions of the characters. The picture Rachel drew brought tears to my eyes; she seemed to know.

>> Initially, I was going to stop reading, & so happy I didn't. To the author, thank you for such a beautiful story of the spirit & love's resurgence. 5 stars Bob

No entiendo que son estás cosas húmedas que salen de mis ojos, cada vez que leo está obra... Gracias!

Wow. Emotionally drained. One of the nest stories and authors on this site. I do hope he takes the time to read the comments and is encouraged to continue writing.

Fantastic story from beginning to end.

One of the all time best on this site

Loved the story.I saw a comment about couples not being able to get back together after the loss of a child, and that's been my experience too. But the way this was written it worked and they found themselves. Yup, my allergies were going too trying to read that last page. I did like page 5 though. ;-)

And to anonymous from 6 days ago, this is more of the kind of loving wives stories we want to read. Sure both parts of the couple cheated emotionally, but not physically like most of the stories in this forum. Thank You for sharing it with us.

Sweet baby Jesus, what have you DONE to me?! Q

Even after giving your wonderful story 5 stars, I feel like I am cheating you out of the many more stars you deserve

Nice story, however it does not belong on an erotic literature site.

This was great! Totally 5 star.

This story is incredible, thank you for sharing it with the world. The part where they found Rachel's drawing in the Harry Potter novel literally brought tears to my eyes.

Sadly I can only give this story 5 stars . Yes it is a tearjerker as it made my eyes water up

I have been enjoying this author's stories lately. I appreciate this one because so often parents who have lost a child cannot find their way beck to each other. The grief is too intense. But the way the author handles this situation allows for a logical and sweet conclusion. As others have mentioned, I wish this author was still posting on this site. oshaw, I wish you well and hope you are publishing somewhere else.

Tearjerker- yes. Unbelievably great story- yes. Ten stars if I could, - yes!

Wow!! Amazing story!!

Thank you very much for a wonderful experience.

This was a painful read the first time. As a revisit and my second time reading, I’m really not too sure why I put myself through it again. A very touching story.

I read it several times and still cry at the end. A sad but wonderful story of love.

Grief is a powerful emotion. It destroys everything in its path. Been there, done that, got the T shirt.

Our youngest got pancreatitis, the night he went into hospital the doctors said to prepare ourselves he was not expected to survive the night. My wife and l literally collapsed.

So horrible, so devastating…………

5/5

Read it again. Crying again. So heart-rending and touching. Where there is Love, there is Hope.

Revisit after a while, broke my heart, first time, just as powerful now. 5*

It's an exceptional piece.

I've been in relationships where silence consumed the attention. It reminds me of the song sound of silence.

When words spoken in anger are replaced with words unspoken, and then you crave the silence more than the voice of the other. It can become a palpable thing. It is rare that silence is void of conversation, more that the silence is merely filled with conversations in your own head and the argument is fought out with charactures of your own making.

Shit, that last page was hard to get through.

Wow!

Powerful story telling!

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Damn allergies, every time I read this!

Well done !

A story with so much potential left unfulfilled.

From the first line of the story, where silence "consumed the attention of the couple in the vehicle."

Huh?

Using Marilyn's height (5'10") as an excuse for her isolation at school? If she is half as beautiful as described, that would never stop most high school or college guys from approaching her. It may stop a few, but not most.

My first real girlfriend was almost two inches taller than me, (I'm 6'1") and her beauty was the thing that made me hesitate/uncomfortable initially. Her personality defused any discomfort minutes after we met. The only reason Marilyn didn't have dates to prom would be her. Case closed.

If she had little or no experience with boys, how would she know "that he was desperate to keep the conversation going with her" (Page 2) instead of thinking "he wants to get away from me" which would be the more logical conclusion based on her character development at that time?

When did the courtesy of pulling out a chair for a woman make you a chauvinist or second class citizen?

It's not what you do, it's how you do it. If you use it as an excuse to look over her shoulder to leer at any cleavage or leg that may be exposed, (yeah, she'll know) you are both of those things. Otherwise, you are polite with good manners. I have never received a negative comment from a woman for holding chairs, doors, or any other act of courtesy and respect. If it had happened, it would have been a very short date.

Again from page 2 concerning Ray's jacket, "Now she was hoping that she was being claimed." WTF!!

As far as Ray's friends, what kind of douche bags are they? Talking about Ray breaking her in before they get a turn? Without at least a few probing questions to find out if he liked her or not? Or how much?

When you insult a woman, you insult the man she's with. Period. The first guy would have been on his ass, the rest would learn the easy way, or the hard way.

To shallow to get to the core and too over the top to be possible.

Having read a couple of stories by the author, this appears to be a recurring theme.

Having read several comments, from my perspective, folks are getting hung up on the potential of what could be a truly heart wrenching story (a child dying from cancer), and overlooking how it is told.

The only thing missing is "Once upon a time..." and "They lived happily ever after."

FYI, a little over a year ago, I lost a friend (my first) of 47 years to pancreatic cancer.

Beautiful. Thank you for sharing.

Very well written, a lot of emotional weight because of the subject, and deserves 5stars

No complaints, I lost both of my angels, to divorce and then to war, both followed me into the Army and then the Rangers.

Great work. An emotional roller coaster, well-written, perfectly

-paced. I stopped several times to cry. Love the surprise ending. I cried again.

You’re a genius! And so talented! If you’re an author I’d buy all your books … please start writting again …

OMG.

A wonderful story. It made this 83 yo man cry. I lost my wife

50 years ago due to mental health issues which

also badly affected my relationship with my children.

Two years ago I met a woman on the internet and although we have yet to meet in person it promises to be what I have been looking for ever since we split up and divorced.

Second time I have read this. Cried both tomes.

WHAT, ONLY 5 STARS!!!!!! Not a dry eye in the house.

5*******************************************

Très belle histoire mais ce connard de John méritait une bonne raclée pour avoir profité du désarroi d'une femme de surcroît mariée.

1 million Stars and more. I can't stop crying. Nothing is worse than a suffering child. Thank you Oshaw. Just the best.

I cry everytime I read this story.