by Fitnerd7
Of course, this is a place to let others know of your imagination, but it'll turned bad if it's like horror or a nightmare, a 50-inch butt and fat breasts isn't a thing I want to recall on a thin and slim body.
Having "superpowers" isn't a fetish its a sci/fi fantasy so clearly this is in the wrong category.
In dire need of proofreading. spelling and punctuation. It seems to have a setup for a good story, but I couldn't go much past first few paragraphs.
A brilliant beginning to what I hope may be a good series of stories. Keep up the good work,
Thanks for the feedback. Yes I realised that it's a bit to quick, but in my defense it's my first story ever. It also covers fetshes that I really wanted to express so I kinda wanted to quickly go into the action
The second I read your intro, I knew that this was exactly what I'd been looking for. I love the body control idea. However, I feel like there's an issue with pacing in this story. Everything seems to happen too quickly. Still great though.