by TheRaz0r
I call it tripe because regardless why he fucked over everyone he thought deserved it, he also fucked over marriages, emotions, friendships of people who did nothing wrong.
That means he is no better than the people he wanted revenge on. Which means, he should watch as the women he loves are used and abused.
And why were all these stupid people doing such dumb things? Strange behavior from people that had the IQ of a rock equals a lousy story. Nothing entertaining or fun about this garbage. 1 star.
Just some rats, fucking in the gutter. Were there really seven chapters of this crap? I couldn't make it past the second page of this one. Wrong category, shitty story.
Excellent ending, you took your amoral character and revealed that he was actually very moral. The strategy of revenge was methodical, each target was befriended and seduced. In the end, the ultimate target was an active participant in his own downfall.
maybe I've got to go back and read the earlier chapters cause I don't get the ending.. revenge for what
Did not see the ending coming. Not a fan of revenge stories, but this one was good. As for it not being a loving wife story, it seemed like the hero gave plenty of loving to the wives in this story. As for the haters, you need to read in the romance section. It will have all the moralistic content you seem to want!
"Revenge is a dish best served cold!!!!!" Quite well conceived and executed. For revenge to be most powerful it must completely surprise the recipient and you accomplished that. The various seductions were well written with some somewhat over the top but it's fiction so that's part and parcel of the genre. Well written and a good read. Your choice of scenes for the seductions plus the youngest daughter's penchant for the protagonist added more richness.
Great story - until the twist at the end. Why?
Silly as it was I thought you pulled it back in this last page or 2, good description S throughout, characters were odd, but it's a story.
While I enjoy twists in a story, it would be nice if there was an explanation to the twist at the end of this story.
The story was enjoyable but the ending, killed it.