All Comments on 'Gypsy Wolf Ch. 05'

totally hated the fuckfest that you allowed mated alphas to have.being mated is supposed to mean giving up the fucking around thats why they are free to fuck whoever whenever before the mate since they are to be only for eachother forever.

What happened to to the story with the old rogue, great keep it coming

this story is getting better and better, we really like the twist with the alphas getting to sample someone else sexually from time to time, we wish the chapters where a little longer. and posted more frequently.

Totally agree with relion75. After they become mates, they are supposed to remain loyal to eachother. No more playing around! Grrr! Didn't like this chapter at all.

agree with the others.

by all means add hot sex when it makes sense in story, but this just looks like it's forced into the story at a random point where it does NOT fit (when the adventure plot has thickened), with participant where it's NOT believable (supposedly faithful mates), while the interesting plot becomes completely neglected.

When is she ever gonna mention that she remembers the ace of spades brand and that the wolf was black?

Dont like the foolin round and sex was randomly thrown in there felt cheap

0_o

Talk about ragefest.

(If I could use italics/bold/underline instead of caps, I would. This is also only directed at those who were overly enthusiastic in denouncing the author's work.)

Hey, rude readers, here's a wonderful idea:

CONSTRUCTIVE criticism.

First off:

Don't hate if you can't emulate.

Lack the skill? Don't be a buzzkill.

In other words -- if you can't be brave enough to put your own writing up, don't be so quick to judge those that do.

Another thing -- this is THIS AUTHOR'S WORLD -- there is no 'supposed to be' [insert stereotypical-idea/story-trope/preconceived-notion here].

BECAUSE THIS ISN'T YOUR WORLD -- IT'S CHROMEX'S.

He can write whatever the hell he wants, and it's canonical all the way. He doesn't need to ask your permission first -- in fact, next chapter, he could introduce a character called "The Periwinkle Butt-Sniffer", and you wouldn't be able to do jack-shit about it.

As far as the free sex goes vs. the mating; technically -- even though I don't give a damn one way or the other about this -- both of them are free to fuck whomever they want, whenever they want, until they have actually mated, according to 'stereotypical' "supposed to be" lore. (WHICH IS STILL IRRELEVANT, BECAUSE THE AUTHOR'S WORD IS "WORD OF GOD" FOR THEIR WORLD.)

And they haven't actually done that yet.

On top of that, though, I do agree that, given the urgency of the witch-issue, the sex felt jarring and out-of-place at the time. (I do realize that particular scene needed a segue which allowed Liz to interrupt Natalie, though. I still think it was a bit of a forced scene. Well-written, certainly, but I think it probably would've fit better in a slightly different situation. Then again, I don't know what you have planned for the story, and that could be a precursor/precedent-setter for some future plot-point.)

you enter their world, where they make the rules both for the characters and the readers. Weres are fantasy, just incase some of you forget.

The sex scene might have been a tad rushed but it was fine. Remember it is the author's story. Criticism is welcomed but blatant disregard for the author is not. Find a way to reword it and express your thoughts in a positive manner. Way to go and I can't wait for the next update

I clicked four by mistake, but this is a 5 star story. Keep up the work.

to those of you that dont like it when the readers say mean things to a writer i say shut the fuck up.we readers whether we can write or not have some things we expect to see or read when we enter the realm of the story line.if we are reading a story about weres we expect to see them change to the animal or human form sometime in the story.if it is a vamp we expect to learn when the were turned to give context to the way the act.we also expect soulmates to be faithful and not fucking everyone else in the story since that is what is meant by mates not wife.i do acknowledge that the write can do as he/she pleases in their story,but somethings are a given to somethings.batman is rich superman is from krypton if you switch things around then the whole backstory of the roles is off.

I have to say I agree with those who are adding constructive criticism, there are few actual species that stay with a single partner and not partners and when talking about fantasy creatures there is no set rule. Speaking on were breeds in general the fact that they are not raving psychopathic killers on full moons is more against historical cannon than an open mating, if the alphas have actually marked each other as their only which I don't remember being the case here. Any thing outside of historical myth and legend is all against "cannon" and unusual to begin with so unless you can help Chromex resolve the strange sex scene issue by offering real suggestions to make it seem less forced or odd pipe down and stop complaining. There is only one area that has legends differing from the European concept of were and that's the native American legends which also differ in that those that changed had second skins or were evil and stole the skin of others meaning that it was not something that could be given via a bite. You either had to be born with the second skin and natural to it or you had to have violently stolen the skin of another meaning you're talking about shifters and skin walkers not were at this point. Since this concept includes Gypsies or Romani tribes it can be inferred that the take is from Europe meaning that the fact that they don't become raving lunatics based on the moon cycle is already a deviation from accepted lore like the common were theme found these days. The author has even explained the deviation being that the myth was created around rouges and since no mention of them founding a religion on Luna or a Moon based deity has happened to my knowledge matings are like marriages when humans find the one and can take any shape or form they want. A soul mate is just that the other half that completes you, meaning that the wide range of human interaction is relate able to any situation that can be found in the current were packs. That can range from monogamous to amorous pairings so step off your high horse

The only reason the sex scene seems forced is that the witch was such a pressing issue, though there was some fore shadowing about such a thing occurring, the fact that she didn't lead with a mental message about the witch is the only odd part about that. She walked in on two sexual beings in the throws of passion with an open invitation so it doesn't seem so odd that she would join, but I would think the characters serious nature about being the object of an unnatural lighting strike would come before joining not that I think she wouldn't have joined after mentioning it. Though to be fair I'm not the writer and I don't know the character as intimately so I could be wrong as Liz has shown her self to be sexual when she wants to be.

As to the Ace of spades thing, its been mentioned that only her subconscious knows, maybe her wolf but that's doubtful since the wolf came after the mental block. The only way the wolf would know is if she remembers more from the dreams than her human half does, but a wolf is an instinctual creature and will find it hard to give exact details even if she does know. Remember she's woken up from the nightmare a while back trying hard to remember what important details were in it but it was never actually stated that she remembers them. The fact that her waking mind felt the eyes were familiar and that the ace of spades brand also struck a cord leads me to believe that neither her waking mind or wolf remember these details in clarity, its like waking from a night terror that at the time seemed so real only to remember bits and pieces of it. I've got one that I remember some parts in vivid detail and others are vague, this is to my knowledge an unfounded event but to those who have suffered such trauma as violent rape these night terrors will be based in reality and where grown mind will want to change details the memory wont change which can often lead to complications to confidence of the victim.

#1. The writer creates the parameters. Mated, not mated, exclusive, non-exclusive, polyamorous or monogamous, the writer determines that, regardless of traditional myth, previous tales, or popular understanding. The writer creates the world they want.

#2. You publish, you get criticized. Agree, disagree, constructive or eviscerating, from other writers, or readers only, you put it out there for public consumption, you get unedited response. Free speech goes both ways.

#3. That being said, this particular pack seems a little oversexed. Specifically that Natalie did not recognize that if Elizabeth was interrupting without invitation that it was important and necessary, or why didn't Elizabeth say, "I have some potentially bad news. Do you want it now or later?" Also, she could have used the bond to telepathically communicate that she was sorry to bother her, but... There are some inconsistencies, some misspelling, and some bad grammar, here and there, but I am enjoying the story.

It's really simple if you don't like the story shut up and don't read it. The author doesn't force you to read the story so don't.

Seriously, I like this story so far and I really like the main character, she's got a fucking pet snake and is a bounty hunter, woot. :) For the readers bemoaning the open mateship of the alphas, go write your own run of the mill story and deal with the huge number of readers who say how normal it is. Or you could keep your mouth shut, and enjoy the ride that chromex has let us join in on.

To chromex,

I like your stories, both of them and always look forward to the next chapter. I really hope we see more of Beth at work, with preferably less shocking treatment involved, hope to see Bubbles again soon too.

Follow your own advice and shut the fuck up. No one really cares "what you think".

Love it love it....when is the next chapter

I just sped read through all 5 chapters you have written of Gypsy Wolf and let me just say PLEASE write more.

Don't know what people are on about, this story is HOT, and I look forward to reading more for sure.

Do continue I really want to know what happens next!!

I love this story and I can't wait for the next chapter!! So keep them coming! !

i really hope that you get another chapter up soon. this story has the makings of a really good one. Hopefully it won't end up like so many others that i have saw here and not get finished.

If this was a normal novel I'd read it. I can't wait to find out more about the Gypsy pact, this alpha that just appeared and much much much more!

Please please dont stop this story.

Patiently waiting for the next chapters. Keep up the good work!

This was a great chapter ! That ace of spades was an interesting lead to the next chapter , which I am waiting for with bated breath , < along with Transformation 15 >.

I understand life gets in the way of your writing so I wait impatiently as usual .

Thanks

tx cracker

pleeeease continue this story

Elizabeth had said, "What the fuck was that?" or something along those lines after her interaction with the white wolf and his actions.

The question wasn't answered nor was it answered in the 5th Chapter. The 5th Chapter started with her going after a bail jumper.

Will that question ever be answered?

It left us hanging.

I'm really enjoying the story, but it was such a good part of the story, my curiosity is killing me.

another good story gone to crap....by not finishing it...

Loving things so far. When can we expect chapter 6?

I'm really enjoying this story. I wonder if Logan's the one who attacked Elizabeth and her sister ? I'm dying to see what happens next. Please update again soon.

absolutely awesome! i read alot and this is one of the most entertaining stories i've read in awhile. Just wanted to say thanx and hope u keep writing off to ur other story to see if its just as good!

thanx again,

whisper

I've read the story before, but reacquainted myself with it. The plot is great; the story as a whole is well written, with few to no grammatical errors.

I'd love for the story to continue as I'm curious as to where you shall be taking it. Thank you for going above and beyond with this story. Don't make us wait much longer!

Must have more! This cannot be it

Can't wait for chapter 6. Thoroughly enjoying the story so far.

I CAN NOT WAIT TILL CHAPETR 6 COMES OUT

Great story! Still waiting on chapter 6! This story is to good to let it end here!!

I started reading this when it first came out but for some reason lost track of it. I remembered the plot a couple of weeks ago but not the title or author and despite many searches was unable to locate it until now. So freaking happy I found it again and like every one else I'm really hoping it continues. Awesome work my man.

This story is brilliant cannot wait for it to continue please don't leave it there you have a great way of telling a story please please don't leave it there

I would like to see chapter six as this is honestly a great story.

It is a well written story that needs to be continued

I too hope he returns to this story. It would appear Logan misread his long played hand and thought Mercy had finally emerged as an alpha figuring she would be as controllable as when he raped and turned her years before. I have to wonder if all his other 'mates' were the same way? Trouble will definitely return. I don't think Watcher will take kindly to the rapes or any new harm coming Elizabeth's way. He definitely seems interested in her.

A well written story and a very enjoyable read, Would you please consider finishing this excellemt story for your readers? Because with your last chapter you left so many unanswered questions that I don't know where to start. I had given you 5-STARS for the 1st four chapters but only1-STAR for chapter 5 because it is an unfinished story. Believe I have given boo-coo stories 1-STAR because they were unfinished,

Yeah this story needs to be finished.

It is a pity that you have left it hanging.

Please finish Thanks

As I commented before, wonderful story, compelling characters. Please give us more!

Very compelling story with strong characters and story line want more of this story

What happens with the alpha. Is she mated with the old white wolf. What happens

Please finish the story

Really enjoyed the story great writing and very interesting story line. My only complaint is once agai finding an unfinished story. I see you haven’t posted in a long time and I sincerely hope you didn’t pass like Castlestone did. It would be nice to see the story finished though.

Love the story , well written waiting on next chapters

Great story - I’m so impatient...need the rest of the chapters please!

This story needs to be finished,

A special place is set aside in hell for writers who do finish their stories.

Terrible lack of character development and I wish there were some subtlety - your characters barrel through the story like Mack trucks.