by HungTexan
Love guys and girls that have no hang ups. Xoxoxoxoxo Annete
You get tenses mixed up between present and past.
Just use past tense, it is easier to read.
Really enjoyed. I usually prefer more dialogue, or when authors let the reader into the thoughts & sensations of the character, but this was a very good story. I think many people in the US could benefit from a more open attitude toward sex, and you showed that so well. Thanks.
Only 1 thing seemed off, and that was the quick ending. " Unfortunately all good things do seem to end, and this did as well. But I don't regret any of it and it set the table for many more adventures to come." Did they break up? Did she die? Did they start being conservative?
Still a great story. Thanks for sharing your talent.