All Comments on 'Handy Blanket'

Looking forward to more.

Believable.

Excellent writing -- wonderful buildup. I too look forward to more. Ray

This was a great story. very ... exciting.

This is almost like what happened between my cousin and me but it was her father that almost caught. The main difference is that we were actually fucking in a sleeping bag when he came into our tent. We were front to back and i was balls deep in her pussy when he came in. We hardly even slowed down all the while he was talking to us. At the exact moment that he left, we both came. It was the most erotic thing i have ever experience.

unrealistic you ruined it with the tickling no way would he have stayed after she stopped he would have been pissed at her and told her to go to hell then get up and leave keep it atleast sounding believable

There is no way a guy would ever deny a hot girl like that multiple times. The gender roles are a little backwards here.

Enjoyed every minute of this story, but did find it hard to believe that the girl was the aggressor and the guy was trying to stop. Also had trouble visualizing a girl writing this story, she knows a man's mind too well!

The perfect amount of teasing and taboo. I loved it.

I know it has been 5 years since you wrote this but I have to say that other than the lack of quotation marks and how the dialogue was set out this was a very nice and rather believeable story.

Gawd, he was a pathetic whiny useless little wanker! Not much of a twin, lol! I hate it when authors write the brothers in like that, like a brother wouldn't be itching to strip his hot sister naked and do naughty things with her in a heartbeat!! :)

Try a little more dialogue. "Show it, don't tell it."

This was pretty fun. Seemed sorta like it might have been an experiment or a challenge for yourself, to write it in this way. Anyway I liked it, but I probably wouldn't want to read this style of writing for very long so it's good that it was short.

I also like that it was very erotic even though there wasn't any penetration in the story.

Every set of twins should experience twincest as these two did. Like how it started off as as a normal evening

Very interesting and captivating story but I would love to read what happens next with them. Do they go all the way and end up fucking each other silly and become lovers? Maybe you could let us know.

I'd love to see a chapter 2

The handy blanket could have come into play sooner and allowed much more play! I gave it 5 stars for the effort, but I think it should have carried on further.

Good story EXCEPT for loser brother.

Send his sister here.

I am stiff under my blanket

I liked the kids and the story. I can relate as a former 18 year old boy. Stuff like that can be scary for the first time. If you're not hot or popular being a virgin at 18 is normal right? Plus the sister factor is bound to cause stress. Anyway my pint is I's like to know how Janie and her brother did. There is a huge potential for disaster and I'd be interested in which way you go...

More please, love to know where this goes from here.